The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria.
"Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term, it will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since beaches and buildings in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
The author of the letter has argued that by charging people to use beaches, not only would the soil erosion’s problem be resolved, but also, it will reap returns in future by benefitting tourism industry. The argument presented by the author is far-fetched, and is based on unwarranted assumptions. Therefore, the author needs to present much more data to make the suggestion more persuasive.
Firstly, the author states that by charging the tourists for using beach, they would be able to raise sufficient money to replenish the sand on the beach. However, the author fails to provide any data f...
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