Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Author claims that there are areas where cow flu is detected, and if they apply inoculations against to cow flu on people it might be saved many lives, nevertheless there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, so he claimed that they should not permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely applied. The author seems the assumed that inoculations might help or might kill people, but his assumptions stand on very weak evidence that we call for more information.
In his assumptions, he only mention there is a small possibilities that this inoculations might kill people, but he did not give actual information, how is the rate between people who cured from this inoculations or who died, what is the percentage, if it helps more people to cure them rather than killing maybe our decision would require another test before we apply the inoculations. On the other hand, he never mentioned about these people who will die from inoculations against cow flu, are they already sick when they apply the inoculations or not. If person is already a cow flu, then there is no meaning to apply inoculations. Every year before the winter start, we get our flu shot, why before the winter because we have to be salubrious and vigorous to defense with virus.
Additionally, he did not give an information about these people who will die from inoculations, are they really die from inoculations or is there any other reason, maybe they have another disease too. Maybe their body can't help to support their immune system for many sickness in one body. Maybe these people are allergic to one of the ingredients of the inoculations. To give a decision, he should inquire maybe prior tests to check the patients' allergy situation before applying inoculations.
Moreover, if we can know inoculations' cureness level on people, for instance what is the percentage of healing on patient, if they apply this inoculations or not. If cureness percentage is vastly higher than dying proportion, we have to decide to apply inoculations for entailing the prior test to check other situation that patient has either allergy or any other disease. And also, we need an information that, this disease is how frequently is happening? If it is like an bird flu, if it is fastly growing any highly contiguous, it is better we can get these information to apply inoculations to save the people's lives.
In conclusion, his assumptions are unstated for argument, he is only claimed about probabilities that there is insufficient information to decide. And also with this little information he just jumped the conclusion that is not accurate. If he want to decide correctly he has definitely more questions to answer.
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Sentence: In his assumptions, he only mention there is a small possibilities that this inoculations might kill people, but he did not give actual information, how is the rate between people who cured from this inoculations or who died, what is the percentage, if it helps more people to cure them rather than killing maybe our decision would require another test before we apply the inoculations.
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Sentence: Moreover, if we can know inoculations' cureness level on people, for instance what is the percentage of healing on patient, if they apply this inoculations or not.
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