As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems,the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
In this era of advanced technology,technology has changed the way people live with the use of calculators,people gradually get rid of mental arithmetic.due to this fact people are likely to depend on calculators rather than doing mental arithmetic when comes for somewhat complex calculations,due to excessive relying on instruments.
Admittedly, it is true that human’s ability of calculation might diminish to some extent.while technology facilitates humans to think deeply for themselves freeing them from trivial thinking.
especially in field of computers,scientist need not to get bogged down into trivial computations ,therefore these talented scientist can spend their time in doing meaningful things rather then dealing with complex and numerous formulas.for instance,engineers in aerodynamics,can use latest computers to simulate how the attitude of airplane will change with respect to different levels of wind,due to the assistance of modern instruments,these scientists can focus more on how to design airplanes to fly more safely and efficiently.
technology has saved time by making automatic controlling system,now we dont have to wait for a long time outside shopping centres for vehicle parking,it had becamed automatic by making use of cad(computer-aided-design).online transaction has saved transportation time and is reliable can be done from any place.
All the evidence put forward supports an unshakable conclusion that although some human abilities, such as computation, are slightly worse because of reliance on calculators, the ability of thinking is expected to improve rather than deteriorate. On one hand, people, especially sophisticated scientists, will have more time to focus on significant as well as knotty problems. On the other hand, new questions that pop up appear as a result of technology involve humans in more profound contemplation.
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Sentence: Due to this fact people are likely to depend on calculators rather than doing mental arithmetic when comes for somewhat complex calculations, due to excessive relying on instruments.
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Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace comes with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Sentence: technology has saved time by making automatic controlling system, now we dont have to wait for a long time outside shopping centres for vehicle parking, it had becamed automatic by making use of cadcomputer-aided-design.
Error: becamed Suggestion: became
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The content is not well organized.
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para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion
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