"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
This argument stated by the author above seems like a justified point, however a careful its careful dissection will expose a wide array of flaws. The author states that Buckingham College is in a dire need of new dormitories in order to provide housing for the significant influx of students that will be attending Buckingham in the next 50 years. The author uses unsubstantial evidence to attempt to back up his or her claims in the matter. Therefore, this claim must be broken down in order to find the apparent flaws.
To begin, the author claims that Buckingham’s enrollment is growing. ...
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I bet you will get 6.0 in
I bet you will get 6.0 in your GRE writing tomorrow. :)
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