When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.
Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches. It show the full of fatuous way to popular stanley parks and also converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing. It show some unnecessary thing which is use open area for socializing. The above argument has lot of flaws and assumption which is indicate lack thinking as well as some absurdity calculation.
One of Biggest flaws in argument is Study revealed only for one month base. How we can calculate it base on one month period. It take too much time to down the popularity. In major thing is that recordings shows only 50 cars per day. Popularity major by people who come in to car, It one of non sense think. It might be happened due people come from public transport. Or new public transport bus or metro come in park area so public come from public transport. So argument rife with hole and assumption thus not strong for less popularity in park.
Tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. Stanley park there no say how many people comes in week end or in week days. This two comparison is completely contrast. There is no linking between this two. It might be happened stanley park use more public in week end days. Sp carlton use in week days. There is no mention how many public come in stanly park it say only 50 cars comes.
Stanley parks is one of biggest park in town, due to this is lost it popularity because of video camera which is mounted is lost so popularity drop it one of ridiculous reason which is mentation. There is no connection between video camera and popularity drop. Stanley Park has less benches for sitting than Carlton park. There no mention how much bench in carlton park. One think is carlton park is tiny than stanley park it might be happend it easy to calculate benches in tiny park than large stanley park. So i do not think stanley parks has less benches. It possible in stabley park is more green grass for people sitting. If stanley park has bench less then it problem is when park is open but it not suddenly drop the popularity.
Finally, all point consider there is lot of assumption and flaws in above argument. There is not even single point clearly mention why popularity stanley goes down. And in one month time bound is not sufficient to measure popularity, so i think wait for more than 6 months and see what other factors are and calculate properly how many people come with in 6 month period and then result will say what need to improve and why people are not interested in stanley park.
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