5.Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Culture is of vital importance to the development of a country and economy is the foundation of building and protecting it.The government in every country should attach importance to the preservation of cultural carriers.*The speaker’s claim is actually threefold: (1) ensuring the survival of large cities and, in turn, that of cultural traditions, is a proper function of government; (2) government support is needed for our large cities and cultural traditions to survive and thrive; and (3) cultural traditions are preserved and generated primarily in our large cities. I strongly disagree with all three claims.
Admittedly, it is significance of the prosperity of cities for preservation and development of nation’s culture.There are so many historic sites in major cities.For example, Paris, the capital of France, has the Arc de Triomphe and Versailles. Moreover, due to full-equipped infrastructure,major cities have enough financial capacity to support the construction of large museum and library with precious relics and books. However,some historic sites or relics carrying with national culture also exist in countryside and some remote areas.Even some of them are in fact a country’s cultural hearth. But due to limited resources and inclination of policy to give priority to the development of major cities,financial support cannot be allocated to these areas in time and therefore some culture might be not able to be preserve well. For instance, in some centuried countries with a long history, historic sites in some hearths have been destroyed as a result of the frequency of war and change in dynasty.
Besides, governments are ought to aware that financial support as the only approach is not enough for the protection of historic relics.A list of protective measures should also be taken action to make contribution to the preservation of culture.In addition, some cultural carriers is intangible such as local accent or language.For example,Due to the prevalence of Putonghua in Chinese mainland, many ethnic minority languages are no longer circulated, so such cultures need public support to arouse the public's awareness of language and culture protection.Thus,we can see simply investing money is not an effective way for culture inheritance.
To sum up,it is not reasonable to blame government’s financial support for major cities upon the preservation of culture in these places.Although how to preserve and inherit a culture still needs to be discussed, it is unwise to simply invest money in big cities to achieve cultural preservation and inheritance. In fact, diverse cultural forms and different distribution, must be analyzed according to different national conditions. Only by adopting the correct means and the reasonable allocation of funds, can the cultural protection be fully realized.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, even so, for example, for instance, in addition, in fact, such as, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2404.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53917050691 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32163776033 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52534562212 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 39.0 23.0359550562 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 179.736905982 60.3974514979 298% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.545454545 118.986275619 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 39.4545454545 23.4991977007 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.0 5.21951772744 307% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297615338148 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106382161527 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910484780589 0.0758088955206 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193575018 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736893071552 0.0667264976115 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.4 14.1392134831 173% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 14.97 48.8420337079 31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.9 12.1743820225 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.44 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.38706741573 123% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.6 11.2143820225 157% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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