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Society comprises of many classes of people and the younger of these are the most important of all. A society should prepare its younger generation by thorough leadership in different sectors by creating means of cooperation. I strongly agree with the statement and argue that the importance of cooperation can be realised at a much broader level in terms of government, technology, projects and the industry sectors for the following two reasons.
To begin, cooperation means working together as a team. It can be in a company, or an industry or even government. A leader is created through strong decisions in times of hardship for the community. For instance, America's greatest leader of all time, Franklin Roosevelt, was a successful person during his tenure as the President due to his strong and bold decision making capabilities. This was the combined outcome of the people surrounded by him who constantly advised and cooperated with every small decisions. If there would have been a competition between these people, the state couldn't have run smoothly. So, the cooperation among the younger people generates the combined result of bettterment for a society. Wouldn't competition have created jealousy and a will to do harm to the leaders? It certainly would. As a result, the growth of the nation would have mostly deteriorated. As another example, Elon Musk, the founder of SpaceX and Tesla, and one of the richest person in the world, have created his companies through the cooperation between different sectors of people. The proper communication between different sectors in the industry as well as their desire to work together rather than competing against each other has made it possible for him to become a successful businessman. So, it shows the necessity of the cooperation among the younger generation.
On another note, leaders can become confident with the people around them as they cooperate accordingly. For instance, the time when Barack Obama became the President of the United States of America, was a difficult time as the whole world was going through economic crisis. At that time, the democrats around him cooperated with him to such an extent that he became a more confident person in terms of decision making for the nation as a whole, which resulted in the overall progress of the country. This augmentation in confidence helped him to be elected as the president for the second time in a row and he completed his run as a successful person. If there was competition present with him and others, he couldn't have been able to succumb to strict positions in times of economic crisis. So, the young people needs to have a sense of cooperation in them for creating a better tomorrow.
Although some might suggest competition creates an affinity towards more development in terms of government, industry or other fields but this is a narrower perspective. In a broader sense, competition can not create a stable government, or a working environment; rather it creates difficult situations for the country. For example, Srilanka's current economical debt is just an example for the competition instilled in the young people. So, coooperation is the best option to multiply the good outcomes from government, industry and other fields and the best way to do that is to istill this cooperation in the young people of the society, preparing them for strong leadership.
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- A nation should require all of its students to study under the same national curriculum before they enter college 50
- Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve 66
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate 33
- As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In 66
- Governments officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve 66
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
Society comprises of many classes of people and the younger ...
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Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'Americas the greatest'.
Suggestion: Americas the greatest
...rdship for the community. For instance, Americas greatest leader of all time, Franklin Roosevelt,...
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Message: Did you mean 'had been'?
Suggestion: had been
...ed with every small decisions. If there would have been a competition between these people, the...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...etition between these people, the state couldnt have run smoothly. So, the cooperation ...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Wouldn't
...ed result of bettterment for a society. Wouldnt competition have created jealousy and a...
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Message: Consider using 'the surrounding democrats'?
Suggestion: the surrounding democrats
... through economic crisis. At that time, the democrats around him cooperated with him to such an extent t...
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...etition present with him and others, he couldnt have been able to succumb to strict pos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, second, so, still, well, for example, for instance, as a result, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2846.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10035842294 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88691599967 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.462365591398 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 887.4 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8461027005 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.461538462 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73076923077 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.243740707755 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0831039109588 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0758088955206 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150359130593 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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