An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly affected patients. Through gaining such access, the patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition. Write a respo

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An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly affected patients. Through gaining such access, the patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly affected patients. Such access will help the patient determine how much experience the doctor has in treating the illness that the patient is suffering from and if the doctor charges an excessive amount of money for services. All of this is critical in helping the patient determine which doctor is best.
A doctor’s record shows how many patients of a particular illness the doctor has treated. For someone who is sick, both are critical in determining the best doctor. For example, my grandfather, Charles Ditchik, battled several different kinds of cancer all throughout his life. Despite this, he managed to live for an astonishing 82 years. This is because when he suffered from cancer – whether it be skin cancer, lung cancer, or bladder cancer – he always chose the most qualified doctor. Charles chose the doctor that had the most experience and the greatest success in dealing with the specific type of cancer he was dealing with. And he did this by finding out how many patients with his type of cancer a particular doctor cured through hospital and public medical records. Had he not been given access to such information, he would not have been able to make such informed decisions regarding his medical choices, and may not have lived as long as he lived. Like my grandfather, there are many who are suffering from chronic or life-threatening illnesses and deserve access to doctors’ medical records to choose the most qualified doctor for them.
Experience isn’t the only thing that is important in a doctor’s history. There are other factors that can be critical to patients, such as how much a doctor will charge for treatment. For example, suppose a low-income construction worker gets an impinged shoulder on the job. As a result, his movements become restricted and painful. As his occupation involves manual labor, he clearly needs to begin physical therapy to repair his shoulder. At the same time, as his annual income is limited, he cannot afford costly treatment. If he had access to a doctor’s record, he could determine which doctors have a history of fixing shoulder impingements in the quickest amount of time. A less time-consuming treatment means more money saved. However, without access to a doctor’s record, there is little to no way for the worker to know which doctors will most likely treat him in the fastest amount of time. The worker could ask the doctor himself, but of course every physical therapist will say he or she is the best at treating injuries. Furthermore, it is not at all uncommon for a doctor to intentionally prolong treatment in order to receive more money. Access to a doctor’s records can help act to safeguard this worker against such fraudulent practice. Of course, this situation is not specific to this particular construction worker. Countless citizens who have limited budgets get injured, and through access to a doctor’s record, can best determine the most affordable doctor to treat them.
Now, some may argue that a doctor’s record does not necessarily determine whether the doctor is competent. This point is completely valid. Patients vary widely: just because one doctor had less success in treating an illness compared to another doctor, does not make the latter doctor more competent. It could be that the former doctor was unluckier in his or her patients. However, this should be for a potential patient to decide when he or she looks through a record. Furthermore, many could argue that access to a doctor’s record would violate patient confidentiality. This is also a valid argument. Even so, there are basic precautions that could be taken in order to allow ailing patients to view their doctor’s record while protecting the privacy of former patients. For example, records could exclude the specific names of people whom the doctor treated. In addition, And there are many other measures that could be enacted that could protect privacy without sacrificing transparency.
Access to a doctor’s record is extremely helpful for ailing patients in helping them determine the best doctor to treat them. Without such access, patients are limited in determining the competency of their doctors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
...y grandfather, Charles Ditchik, battled several different kinds of cancer all throughout his life...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, similarly, so, while, even so, for example, in addition, of course, such as, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 19.5258426966 164% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 58.6224719101 135% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3632.0 2235.4752809 162% => OK
No of words: 706.0 442.535393258 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14447592068 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.1546736571 4.55969084622 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84354218717 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 297.0 215.323595506 138% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420679886686 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1113.3 704.065955056 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 20.2370786517 188% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1524386795 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5789473684 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5789473684 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86842105263 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.46358573609 0.243740707755 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134055619911 0.0831039109588 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130383179126 0.0758088955206 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.351580948312 0.150359130593 234% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116502366022 0.0667264976115 175% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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