When we discuss the volunteering work in the schools, as far as I am concern, it is necessary to require all parents to spend volunteer time to their children's shools.Especially at presrent, it can't be more important to emphasize the significance of education. For the children, they would liake to follow thir parents' doing who would make good examples for their sons and daughters. For the parents, it is a good chance to know their children's behavior and the schools' perfomance. For the schools, the teachers and directors would know what did they do well and what they did not. So I will address my views for this triple-win.
To begin with, the parents are good terachers of the children. As their parents go to schools they are in to take part time job for free, they would ge to know how do their parents do in schools, also they would be aware of that their parents would be happy to help others.Thus The children would learn to know everyone should conttibute themselves to the society, the schools is a good place for the contribution as both of the schools and chilren would benefit from the effort of the parents. Thus there would be a harmonious phenomenon forming between the schools and families. When the children grow up, they immeditately know what they should do when their children, the next genration, go to schools- to volunteer in the schools to help, to feel, or to know their children's behavior at least.
In addtion, the parents would know the perfomance of the children in schools. In today's society, more and more people focus on the education, let alone the parents who raise boys or girls to study. Thus whether their children studying well in schools is the first thing they want to know when talk about the perhaps only students in the family. Thus I contends that many parents would like to take part in the activities of schools, indluding the volunteerin time in schools. If they found something wong with their children at school, they would correct it right away. Besides, this method is not the patent of developed countries, as we can see lots of parents would spent their limited time in schools in China. Because this method is usefull.
Finally, with more connection with families , the faculty of schools would get to know what is their shiny point and where they did not so well. When the parents entering to the gates of schools, it is the time for them to find the flaws and merits of the schools, later they would tell the faculty of schools where their children studying in. In this correspondesnce, the schools also benefit a lot as they could summarize the points which they should insist on and the flaws they need to correct immediately. In this circulation, the schools would become more and more efficient and the children would also benefit from the developments of their schools.
In all, it is a good phenomenon that the society take more concertrations on education from the perspect of parents' volunteer time in children's schools. I totally aggree with this suggestion in that the children, parents and school would all benefit from this volunteering work. In this way, the whole society would make more progress starting from the focusing on the education.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, if, so, thus, well, at least, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 12.4196629213 209% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2671.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 557.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79533213645 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85807034144 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61178014715 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.400359066427 0.4932671777 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 755.1 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.10242305 60.3974514979 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.130434783 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2173913043 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198687175497 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791023086499 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499392842855 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143549919719 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196769300821 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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