In this letter, the marketing director aruges that the Classical Shakespeare Threatre of Bardville should start a "Shakespeare in the park" program this summer in order to attract more new audience members, in that the Avon Repetory Company made a scuccess by doing so which brought them 10 percent benefits increased. As the atuhors worries the theatre is facing a serious drop of the profits even they advertised more than before, the author's assumption that the Classical Shakespeare Theatre would have more profits is not convicing. More evidence are required and there are some loopholes in this letter, we need to reexamine them carefully.
To begin with, there was no clear reason to show us why there was a decline of the audience's number. Maybe the local people do not like the plays of Shakespeare anymore,or possibly, the audience nowadays feel like watching the plays online instead of going to the theatre. Thus even if the company starts the program like Avon Repertory Compay did, the result may be totally different as the insuficient audicence who would like to go to the park to watch the play, even sometimes the play on the cellphone could meet their demands. Moreover, the reason of the fewer and fewer profits of the theatre is still in question. In that maybe the expense of advertisement was so high that it broke the balance between the income and payment of the company. Also, the appearance of the advertisements are not mentioned be the author, thus we could not evaluate the effect of the advertisements.
In addtion, the successful experince of the other company may not be suitable for the Classical Shakespeare Theatre of the Bardville. In that the director does not tell us what did the Avon Repertory Company mainly run for, we could not evaluate the perfomance of the plays of Shakespeare in the park. Possibly , the Avon Repertory Company generally run the modern plays rather than the classica ones, the difference is huge enough to incur different results. If the Shakespeare's play were started in the park, the company may not gain the profits like the Avon company did before.
Finally, there are some problems about the dates.Firstly, whether the ten-year declining of audience not abnormal is still in question, maybe it is the fact that the population in the bardville were fewer than before, thus the audience number declined. In this situation, the directors' suggestion would not be feasible as there were fewer people already. Secondly, as we are looking at the perfomance of the Avon Repertory Company which seemed to be so good, we should know it was the story of two years ago, thus how did they do in these two years was not mentioned by the author.
In coclusion, the author's arugements is not convincing.
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- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this letter, the marketing director aruges that the Classical Shakespeare Threatre of Bardville should start a 'Shakespeare in the park' program this summer in order to attract more new audience members, in that the Avon Repetory Company made a scuccess by doing so which brought them 10 percent benefits increased.
Error: scuccess Suggestion: success
Error: summer Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: aruges Suggestion: argues
Sentence: As the atuhors worries the theatre is facing a serious drop of the profits even they advertised more than before, the author's assumption that the Classical Shakespeare Theatre would have more profits is not convicing.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Error: atuhors Suggestion: authors
Error: convicing Suggestion: convincing
Sentence: Maybe the local people do not like the plays of Shakespeare anymore,or possibly, the audience nowadays feel like watching the plays online instead of going to the theatre.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Sentence: Thus even if the company starts the program like Avon Repertory Compay did, the result may be totally different as the insuficient audicence who would like to go to the park to watch the play, even sometimes the play on the cellphone could meet their demands.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: cellphone Suggestion: telephone
Error: audicence Suggestion: audience
Error: insuficient Suggestion: insufficient
Sentence: Moreover, the reason of the fewer and fewer profits of the theatre is still in question.
Error: theatre Suggestion: theater
Sentence: In addtion, the successful experince of the other company may not be suitable for the Classical Shakespeare Theatre of the Bardville.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Error: experince Suggestion: experience
Sentence: In that the director does not tell us what did the Avon Repertory Company mainly run for, we could not evaluate the perfomance of the plays of Shakespeare in the park.
Error: perfomance Suggestion: performance
Sentence: Possibly , the Avon Repertory Company generally run the modern plays rather than the classica ones, the difference is huge enough to incur different results.
Error: classica Suggestion: classic
Sentence: If the Shakespeare's play were started in the park, the company may not gain the profits like the Avon company did before.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Finally, there are some problems about the dates.Firstly, whether the ten-year declining of audience not abnormal is still in question, maybe it is the fact that the population in the bardville were fewer than before, thus the audience number declined.
Error: ten-year Suggestion: tender
Error: bardville Suggestion: advise
Sentence: Secondly, as we are looking at the perfomance of the Avon Repertory Company which seemed to be so good, we should know it was the story of two years ago, thus how did they do in these two years was not mentioned by the author.
Error: perfomance Suggestion: performance
Sentence: In coclusion, the author's arugements is not convincing.
Error: arugements Suggestion: arguments
Error: coclusion Suggestion: conclusion
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 468 350
No. of Characters: 2244 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.651 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.795 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 156 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.529 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.833 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.572 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 113, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...eare Threatre of Bardville should start a 'Shakespeare in the park' pro...
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Line 1, column 448, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n they advertised more than before, the authors assumption that the Classical Shakespea...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...ot like the plays of Shakespeare anymore,or possibly, the audience nowadays feel li...
^^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...online instead of going to the theatre. Thus even if the company starts the program ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 224, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e Avon Repertory Company mainly run for, we could not evaluate the perfomance of ...
^^
Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ays of Shakespeare in the park. Possibly , the Avon Repertory Company generally ru...
^^
Line 7, column 50, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Firstly
...there are some problems about the dates.Firstly, whether the ten-year declining of audi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 277, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
...number declined. In this situation, the directors suggestion would not be feasible as the...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, even so, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96137339056 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73596987125 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463519313305 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 705.55239521 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.35795772 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.0 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4117647059 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64705882353 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173039767299 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055882018333 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631349527155 0.0701772020484 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871825499816 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680708664295 0.0628817314937 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.