It is the resposibility of a society to take great care to prepare its youth for the challenges of the future, since they will be the ones forging the path ahead. This includes preparing young people for future leadership roles in government, industry and other fields. Preparing young people for leadership and related positions is always important. In almost every field, leaders are necessary. Author states that, the best way to prepare future leaders is promoting cooperation rather than competition. I moderately disagree with this position for two reasons but i do concede that cooperation is also important.
Firstly, is cooperation important for all fields? For example, maybe government fields demand cooperation skills more than competition abilities, because there is no need for competition. But according to research conducted in 2015, in industry and other fields competition is very high. Thus, one who can not compete is no longer survive not only in leadership but also in any other position.
In addition, diminishing competition can have bad effects. According to researchs, competition increase development in high extends. In addition, researches show that it increases perception and fast thinking. It also make people more engaged in subject. It faciliate learning process and make it entertaining. For these reasons, we can not overlook the signifiance of competition.
Nevertheless, i admit that cooperation skills are important for leaders. Because, main job of leaders is communicating and promoting collaboration in workplaces. If they have not enough cooperation sense, effectivity of work can significantly decrease.
So it could be concluded that competition is as necessary as cooperation and the youth should be malleable to any situation they encounter.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, thus, for example, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 58.6224719101 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1522.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 273.0 442.535393258 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57509157509 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1795167197 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578754578755 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 23.0359550562 56% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.9090504403 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.1 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.65 23.4991977007 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299631885629 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832323422275 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692947934222 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139871052024 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100971771334 0.0667264976115 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 48.8420337079 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.49 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 11.2143820225 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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