The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry ,or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
How to prepare young people for leadership in all fields? Many believe that the government should instill in them a sense of cooperation rather than competition. Needless to say, competition and cooperation are both essential elements to modern society; in my view, I agree much about the statement except for some cases.
It is acknowledged by most people that cooperation plays such a substantiate role in today’s society that nearly no one could survive without it. In political area, despite the fact that leaders of different parties compete with each other fiercely at election, after one takes charge, the other is often likely to take side with it especially on critical issues. The international cooperation is also important to the progress of the whole world. During the WW2, countries like America, Britain, the Soviet Union put aside their ideological divergence, combined together to defeat the Nazis. In the Kyoto conference, developed and developing countries come to an agreement to reduce emission of gas which will help prevent the global warming. In business field, the force of cooperation could not be negligible neither, as the famous saying goes,” If you could not defeat your rivalry, then join in them.” It is common to see that two large corporations make contracts about long-term cooperation in order to achieve more profits. From numerous cases in each field, we could easily realize what benefits cooperation could bring to us.
However, sometimes cooperation may lead to unequal results which dampen the enthusiasm. For example, some people deliberately take advantages of others and do not make any real contributions in a cooperation task, but in the end they achieve as much as others, who payed much more than him. These folks are notorious as “free-riders”. On these certain conditions, competition may show its edge. As the evolution theory reveals, in biological circle, species compete with each other for ample resources, and only the most suitable ones could survive. So are the same in many fields in human history, though somewhat cruel ,it is true that the ‘natural selection’ process works well to sweep out those out-dated or useless minds and things, leaving more space for new generation and innovative thoughts.
As everything comes with two sides, too much competence may lead to terrible results too. Athletes sometimes are caught using banned steroids in professional sports in order to boost their own chances of victory, or injury themselves during the fierce matches. Politicians usually waste much money on election which could be better used to improve the social welfare. Thus,whatever field people belong to, it is important for people to recognize various situations and make rational choices. The spirit of cooperation is essential to be educated to the young, as the sense of competition is an innate feature on humane being.
To sum up, although the competition and cooperation seems antithetic, they are in fact two sides of a sword. In order to become a successful leader,young people not only need to compete out others, but master skills of cooperation with others, which demands more of a person’s quality.
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.239388794567 0.238963963785 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.127334465195 0.154291517835 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.110356536503 0.0886310499679 125% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0509337860781 0.0506014161523 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0339558573854 0.0449626384858 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125636672326 0.123526278965 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0135823429542 0.0379742944744 36% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.95984929603 2.82910677849 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0390492359932 0.0316879551592 123% => OK
Particles: 0.00679117147708 0.0014075125626 482% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0780984719864 0.0950106342287 82% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0203735144312 0.0245489744465 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0169779286927 0.0157978311181 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3219.0 2899.98275862 111% => OK
No of words: 512.0 478.390804598 107% => OK
Chars per words: 6.287109375 6.0591788892 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.65681771538 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.39453125 0.369966551584 107% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.294921875 0.285172536893 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.220703125 0.207245337619 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.1484375 0.136322040163 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95984929603 2.82910677849 105% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 234.298850575 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595703125 0.492565540709 121% => OK
Word variations: 78.2045875146 56.8184620615 138% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 21.1264367816 109% => OK
Sentence length: 22.2608695652 23.7468607788 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.2361322598 62.0618507366 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.956521739 143.81877709 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2608695652 23.7468607788 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.695652173913 0.728815259664 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.87931034483 102% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.71264367816 91% => OK
Readability: 51.7530570652 52.2641144681 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.784 1.64547068916 108% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.45969924481 0.39480681544 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0710605719497 0.11556216369 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0484202996567 0.0736162880345 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477771120082 0.531340600358 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144347888733 0.15197228837 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153451877355 0.158818324754 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877772369528 0.0851127212816 103% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.353357912422 0.388921930462 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0286928611189 0.0677916285025 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309334065742 0.28015025965 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771702445006 0.0610219844235 126% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.8591954023 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.30459770115 94% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.96264367816 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 8.10632183908 173% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 3.93390804598 102% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 3.04597701149 131% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 15.0862068966 146% => OK
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay E-rater: 5.0 Out of 6