The argument presented by the author pertaining the threat over coperate funding and reason to reallocate arts funds to public television is flawd. And even the starting deduction and linkage about a fifteen percent increase in visual arts is also not properly bolstered.
First, is the poll result presented with fifteen percent increase right ? From where it came from, from a government body or a private one, we just dont have a proof of its authenticity, so we can not say that figure presented is right or wrong. Additionally, even if we consider it correct, how can we know how many people's data has be polled? It could have included 30, 40, 400 or even 10 we just do not know. So, to bolster this part author should provide the source of the data and also the figures to make this point sounded.
Second, the reason given for increse in number of people visiting city’s art museums is doubtfull. Their could be any number of reasons that would have spur the interest of people to visit museum, and which is independent of television programs about the visual arts. For example, their may be a new item added to museum which is very pivitol for historians or tourist agencies to attract more tourist have added museum in their venue. So, a proper reason is not presented for it.
Third, the propler resason for fear of cut in funding is not cited. Additionally, if we ignore this then also how it can be proven to decrease visit by people to city’s art museums. Thus this is not properly reasoned as, their could be other reasons like which author has not cited.
So, in order to bolster the presented argument the author should address above mention points and make it sound reasonable.
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Suggestion: been
...w can we know how many peoples data has be polled? It could have included 30, 40, ...
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Suggestion: spurred
...e any number of reasons that would have spur the interest of people to visit museum,...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...t by people to city's art museums. Thus this is not properly reasoned as, their...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, then, third, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1417.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73913043478 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4740856897 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528428093645 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.1973821092 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4666666667 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9333333333 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0940962841047 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0362355611296 0.0743258471296 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0395395111395 0.0701772020484 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0469438196205 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542619792133 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.5979740519 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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