Young people of a society are considered to be the future of that nation. That is why instiling proper values and ideology in them is of immense importance. For preparing the young people of the society for the future the best way to would be to instill a sense of cooperation.
As a social creature, human history is built on cooperation. The great achievements we can see around us now are a direct result of teamwork and cooperation between individuals. The industry, government, arts and science all rely heavily on mutual collaboration. Without it the impossible would have been remained impossible, the perks of modern life would not exist. So, it makes perfect sense to prepare the young generation by instilling a sense of cooperation instead of competition.
If children are taught to cooperate instead of compete against each other from early age, their mindset for facing the future challenges of life would be very different. They would not only be able to achieve more in their life, but also will be more content and accomplished as a human being. Excessive competition encourages individualism, bigotry, greed and jealousy. If we do not want the society to fall victim to these, instilling and promoting cooperation instead of competition is a must.
In addition, the modern industrial setting, research and development heavily relies on team work and cooperation. As the horizon of our knowledge is expanding, the charm of individualistic unsocial geniouses are diminishing. Current reasearches in science tend to be multidisciplinary, where many individual needs to contribute to make the work successful. If we encourage competition, then they would not be able to cooperate with each other. There would be a clash of ego, gread and jealousy; ultimately the project would not be able to reach its goal. For this reason, instilling cooperation would give us a much better result than encouraging competition.
Moreover, the earth is now called 'A global village'. Countries are trying to improve their economy, social infrastracture and status of living of the people by collaborating with each other. As each nations become interconnected with each other, they become dependent on each other for various reasons. For example, some countries have natural resources where other countries might have technology to utilize those. If a government decides to grow in isolation and compete instead of cooperating with each other, it is bound to fail in the long run. That is why the young people needs to learn the value of cooperation as they will be taking the responsibility of steering the nation in future.
Cooperation is a very important in our day to day life. While one must admit, fair competition encourages young people to push their limit and improve their skills as a result, a sense of cooperation and collaboration is of much more importance as it will shape their future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 66, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w called A global village. Countries are trying to improve their economy, social ...
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Line 9, column 685, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...e responsibility of steering the nation in future. Cooperation is a very important in ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'while', 'for example', 'in addition', 'as a result']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.219047619048 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.16380952381 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0990476190476 0.0880659088768 112% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0495238095238 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0438095238095 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.121904761905 0.12292977631 99% => OK
Participles: 0.0438095238095 0.0406280797675 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07841765725 2.79330140395 110% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0380952380952 0.030933414821 123% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0990476190476 0.0997080785238 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0304761904762 0.0249443105267 122% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00761904761905 0.0148568991511 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2908.0 2732.02544248 106% => OK
No of words: 474.0 452.878318584 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13502109705 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.362869198312 0.366273622748 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272151898734 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.189873417722 0.200843997647 95% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.162447257384 0.132149295362 123% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07841765725 2.79330140395 110% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 219.290929204 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495780590717 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 57.1291414289 55.4138127331 103% => OK
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6194690265 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.2307692308 23.380412469 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.3735768735 59.4972553346 59% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.846153846 141.124799967 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2307692308 23.380412469 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.423076923077 0.674092028746 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.94800884956 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.21349557522 38% => OK
Readability: 45.4459591042 51.4728631049 88% => OK
Elegance: 1.4962962963 1.64882698954 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440066132561 0.391690518653 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0750816103677 0.123202303941 61% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.057628602939 0.077325440228 75% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.477911828641 0.547984918172 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156414106942 0.149214159877 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140959415599 0.161403998019 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837018836762 0.0892212321368 94% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.35244888919 0.385218514788 91% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0765509767429 0.0692045440612 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273065090548 0.275328986314 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728054985088 0.0653680567796 111% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.4325221239 153% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 14.0 7.22455752212 194% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 3.66592920354 55% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.