The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other field is by instiling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Leadership comes with great responsibility. For being a good leader, one must be cooperative with their co-workers. Otherwise he will be like a dictator leader. So, i think that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for any kind of leadership and in any place, one's motive should be cooperative and not like competitive.
A person becomes a leader by their behaviour, by their intelligence and most importantly interacting with the people he/she will lead. A leader is an icon for their people. He/She influence them in every sector. If a leader have a competitive mind, then he/she will might get success initially, but in the long run he/she will lose the people's love. When there is a competitive mind , it's all about win or lose. If we teach our young people for gaining competitive mind, then he will think only about himself. He will have the only vision for winning and he will not think about the other people.By this procedure, he/she maybe can be a successful leader but he/she will not be a good leader.
Secondly, leader is the main hope of a mass people in those particular sector. He is like idol or icon to everyone. And with respect and belief, people makes him a leader. They will surely expect cooperative behaviour from their leader. A leader has to concerned about every people in his area and he should not be discriminated among people by their hierarchy.
Finally we can say that, competitve mind can make you succeed in your personal life , but it can't make you a good leader. A little bit coöperation can make a lot of change in any sector. Cooperation mind teach us to worked unitedly and it also teach us care about the people's emotion. Sense of cooperation can make a very friendly environment ,and for this reason, it will increase development in a very rapid way.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, as to, i think, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 58.6224719101 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1506.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 319.0 442.535393258 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7210031348 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68859083647 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507836990596 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.9226835797 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.3 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.95 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 7.80617977528 231% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165093539602 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0574098809894 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0743077668548 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111364360931 0.150359130593 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0728285168747 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 100.480337079 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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