The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The tussle between cooperation and competition has prevailed since time immemorial. The prompt here suggests that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership roles is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, and not competition. In my opinion, I strongly agree with the author's suggestion and would argue that any good future leader would prioritize cordial behaviour over unnecessary competition, for the following two reasons.
First of all, the very role of a leader in any domain is to work for the welfare of the people. When one is chosen as a representative or as a master of a particular trade, it is an automatic assumption that others would look up to them. In such a scenario, it is imperative that the leader is scrupulous and reliable. For instance, Jacinda Arden, the current PM of New Zealand, is renowned for the way she leads her cabinet. Despite the leader of a diverse nation, she has managed to make sure that her workers are actual representatives of the people, including those of particularly marginzalised communities. Had she been pitting her staff against one another, it is highly unlikely that she would become a model of good governance. This example illustrates how good leaders are those who believe in cooperation, rather than competing with others. If youngsters with impressionable minds are taught that anyone with an opposing idea is a foe who needs to be beaten, they would grow up with needless animosity and hatred, which would prevent them from being worthwhile leaders.
Secondly, cooperation is a skill that every leaders needs to incorporate at some point. If youngesters are never introduced to this idea of amity, they would not be equipped to handle the challenges of their career. For example, even the great emperor Akbar had to concede to the demands of his people sometimes, and it was his willingness to adjust for his countrymen that made him such a beloved and able leader. In a sharp contrast to this, his grandson, Aurangzeb, was a ruthless dictator who decapitated anyone who chose to disagree with him. By creating an atmosphere of fear and competition, Aurangzeb was initially successful in rising to the top, but all the enemies he had made along the way joined forces to bring upon his downfall. The fact that a single man's hatred for cooperation brought down one of the greatest empires in history is enough proof that being amicable and inclusive is an intergral life skill, especially for someone who wishes to be at the top.
Of course, some may suggest that competition is inescapable, and every person should be prepared to deal with it. However, the fast paced world of today has made being a part of the rat race almost imperative for survival, and a sense of competition is something one can easily pick up from their surroundings. But what needs to be taught is patience, and the importance of listening to all viewpoints, and taking them into account before taking a decision. If a society wishes to progress, it needs to train the nimble minds of children to be leaders who are willing to work together, rather than a pack of wolves who fight till just one remains.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...n my opinion, I strongly agree with the authors suggestion and would argue that any goo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, for example, for instance, of course, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2636.0 2235.4752809 118% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86346863469 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84025953921 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 292.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538745387454 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6883781009 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.523809524 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8095238095 23.4991977007 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52380952381 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187715410172 0.243740707755 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554047937474 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804523606218 0.0758088955206 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129502860104 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0815220225834 0.0667264976115 122% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.8420337079 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.87 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 100.480337079 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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