Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.

Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Development of any nation depends upon various factors such as the extent of development in each business, its govt. policies, its education system to build students having skills and capability in their field, etc. Author in this issue essay trying to suggest that in any field success comes only if the system is revitalize by changing the people that are operating particular business. It is evident that with change in staff there comes the new energy and ideas in that field but it cannot be always the case.
Furthermore, the person currently in power has experience about that system functioning and it becomes easier to cope up with the prime obstacles faced by the system. For instance, a person that is managing a company is constantly increasing the profit of the company by eliminating various problems that he/she acknowledged during his working like excessive cost of transportation, inefficient marketing strategies , inefficient use of resources, financing problems etc. that a new manager will take time to understand. A leader working for last 5 years has better knowledge of problems in his/her area as compared to new and cosmopolitan.
However, the fact that that with entry of new faces in any field there come new energy, enthusiasm, ideas etc that can help to flourish the business. If the present system is not working effectively or giving good results it is beneficial to try some new people for that responsibility. As a corrupt govt. cannot derive its nation, so it is necessary to change the govt. personnel. It also might be the case that new person may have some new ideas that earlier position holder may not have considered. For example, he/she acknowledged that by introducing digital smart projectors in the classrooms it will be a lot easier for students to know the concept by using audio-visual aids together.
So, it may be concluded that it is necessary sometimes to bring change in the system for its revitalization and proper functioning, on the other hand it also cannot be neglected that in many instances it is more sagacious if we carry on with the ongoing system that is producing beneficial results.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, thus, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1997.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 387.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16020671835 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03148444991 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540051679587 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 621.0 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.198266094 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.470588235 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7647058824 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.343810531284 0.243740707755 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117994528636 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.187837833127 0.0758088955206 248% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.265565959225 0.150359130593 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.253409479066 0.0667264976115 380% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.1392134831 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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