Claim: In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should step down after five years.
Reason: The surest path to success for any enterprise is revitalization through new leadership.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The claim emphasizes the importance of term limit on those in power in the field of business, politics, education, government, and any other field, because this allows for revitalization through new leadership which is vital in achieving success for any enterprise. I think this claim makes a valid point.
We have learned from numerous modern or historical examples that staying in power for too long will inhibit revolutionary ideas and foster nepatism and corruption. It is inherent in human nature to long for greater control and power until checked by another force. Such desire, if unchecked, can grow so strong that it takes away the lear’s full attention and effort, as well as the enterprise’s whole wealth, to focus on staying power and obtaining more, instead of working towards the common good of all members. We have witnessed national leaders in countries across the world, who started with strong volition and devotion to the nation, quickly surrender to the gratification of being a leader without effective term limit. Those with nominal term limit extend their control one way or another, advocating that having a long term rule saves election expense and allows for steady development. However, almost all such promises were broken by the leaders themselves, who evolved from national heros to despots, turning an initially vibrant government into clans of corrupt politicians.
While the best humans are susceptible to the corruptive effect of longterm power, it is difficult to select the best humans and put them in power in the first place. Leaders in different fields are selected in different ways; some are nominated within smaller elite groups, some are elected by the public, but they are all exposed to misuse, malfunction, and adulteration. Setting up a term limit provides a bumper to a bad choice, hence disabusing the belief that imperfect humans can select a perfect leader, creating a system that works with unreliable human nature.
However, a term limit of five years may not be broadly applied as the claim states. Some positions involving consistent decision making on long term projects, such as scientific research, can be rendered ineffective by such short term limit. As long as these positions are often under surveillance of other entities, such as the government, bond holders, or an institution higher in the hierachy, they should be entitled to stay in power as long as it benefits the development of the enterprise. The exact length of term limit should vary for different positions, which differ greatly in the nature of decision making process.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, while, i think, such as, as well as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21140142518 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79247243339 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579572446556 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.9696928865 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.266666667 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0666666667 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.21951772744 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163766103746 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558671688424 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0969402107784 0.0758088955206 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129521340989 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140090280017 0.0667264976115 210% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.01 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 133.0 100.480337079 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.