Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree.
Some people may agree with the claim above citing the given reason given above for it and at a first glance it may seem like a cogent argument in favour of the claim. Because if we accept that people are inherently selfish then why won’t there dreams be selfish too. And for the betterment of society, we would want people to have more altruistic goals. But goals being selfish actually depends on the nature of individual. If he is a misanthrope then it doesn’t matter what goals they choose and good they may look from a cursory glance because beneath the veneer of their goodwill there could be some maleficence involved.
If someone is pursuing their dreams than they will work towards it diligently. Whether that dream is a selfish one or not depends on the person and also how they utilize the results of their goals. If the person if selfless than after fulfilling his/her goal they may find a use for it for the wellbeing and advancement of society as a whole. Since they are working towards their dream so they are more likely to give it their all instead of just doing due diligence.
It could happen that someone’s dream may seem foolish to others and they may say that the it is not a worthy goal because of the societal conventions. But if one still works towards their dreams than they may discover new ways of thinking thus changing those same conventions and their so-called worthy goals. For example, during Galileo’s time his research would not have been considered a good goal due to the mindset of people back then. But now we all know the weight of his contributions to physics.
In conclusion, even though it may seem like it would be better for society if people choose to pursue only selfless goals. However, people’s dreams aren’t necessarily selfish and overall may serve to better and help the society even though it may not be clear during the beginning of their journey towards their goal.
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- Claim Even though young people often receive the advice to follow your dreams more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals Reason Many people s dreams are inherently selfish Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or 50
- Claim Even though young people often receive the advice to follow your dreams more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals Reason Many people s dreams are inherently selfish Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... could be some maleficence involved. If someone is pursuing their dreams than t...
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Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: IF_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...e results of their goals. If the person if selfless than after fulfilling his/her ...
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Line 5, column 87, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'it'?
Suggestion: the; it
...foolish to others and they may say that the it is not a worthy goal because of the soc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, thus, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 58.6224719101 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70588235294 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41021470996 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9648530188 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.666666667 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6666666667 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13333333333 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185431808607 0.243740707755 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761375384158 0.0831039109588 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049727965126 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129606801277 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467757876798 0.0667264976115 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 48.8420337079 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 100.480337079 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.