Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
While it is true that the human nature tends to favour self-interest instinctively, it remains to debate what how worthy goals are defined for young people to chase after.
The fact of the matter is that there is no single way to define "worthy goals". Goals that youngsters have set for themselves could very well be the next biggest innovation that would shake the world. To substantiate, the very computer that I am taking the test in is a result of Apple and Steve Jobs. Jobs had quit college to pursue after his "dream" and ended up with Apple that single handedly revolutionised computers and smart technology. If he weren't given the opportunity or liberty to do that, we would not have made such big strides in the technological arena. The same goes with Mark Zuckerberg; if he hadn't quit Harvard to follow his dream of Facebook, we would now not have the extensive social connectivity that we take for granted.
However, world leaders would define worthy goals to be those that would have a huge global impact; realting to the environment, techonology and science, forgetting that not every person would be cut out for those professions. Every young person has a dream; to be a techer or an astronaught and somehow along the way, they lose that dream and end up taking jobs that they have no passion in doing. In situations like this, we see the rise of selfishness as the only gratification that people will recieve in these monotonous jobs is money and that is what they will chase after. It would be wrong to conclude that the person's goal is selfish here as they do not have any other choice.
In contrast, it is the dream of some to become big businesspeople and become wealthy. To these cases, it becomes our responsibilty to teach young people and encourage them to pursue their dreams, while instilling in them a sense of moral responsibility to give back the world and society rather than clipping their wings and forcing them to go after dreams that are not theirs. Flourishing businessmen and investors like Warren Buffet are huge philanthropists and give back to their community.
In conclusion, youngsters must always be given the freedom to pursue their dream whatver it might be but we must inculcate in them moral ethics and responsibility to give back to the same society and community.
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- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 33
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1943.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84538653367 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84461600658 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521197007481 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8240887869 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.533333333 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 23.4991977007 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167959199849 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.056637921642 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537429662752 0.0758088955206 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0837633475292 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029350212383 0.0667264976115 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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