Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
To begin , Today's era where myriads of people especially millennial and z generations at one hand driven by ceaseless need for instant gratification and expectation, on the other hand easily getting succumbed to the jugulating pressure around them , often culminating into suicides, the maxim "follow your dreams" certainly felicitous and can be considered a wise way to go provided even if these are inherently selfish would not be unwholesome to society in any circumstances. The above standpoint can be analysed and deliberated on a case by case study .
Firstly, With the proliferation of stiff competition around the globe among all the working sector is certainly making it difficult
For the people to sustain the enormous pressure that directly or indirectly affect one personal and professional life . At times, also drives a sense of contrition for opting the wrong career. According to Human research Journal of Harvard, the highest percentage of suicidal attempts or growth of such tendency is observed among teenagers and sophomores , these were the cases those who could not weather the expectation of their family friends and societies, the result was more dismaying as it included the students or employees of top institutions and corporates. This certainly arises the questions would the aforementioned scenario have been same if these teenagers and adults would have been encouraged and espoused emotionally, mentally, economically to follow the career of their choice and dream. Plausibly, for a person pursuing his passion would not have fetched him fat earning but at least he would be self-satisfied and enjoying the work he dreamt to do.
Going further, Obviously the worthiness of a career cannot be decided on the basis, how much a person is financially stable, and varies from an individual to individual. Thus, Even if person dream is inherently selfish until and unless it is not impecunious to the society, it should always be buttressed with. For example if a child after completing his early education want to pursue career in entertainment, sports field, their parents should respect their choice and render at most support and guidance to achieve them, on the other hand child also has onus to not opt any career which could have negative impact around them, this is where the family should guide puerile protect them from not getting attracted towards wrong career path.
For example running drug cartel, gangster groups, illegal rackets to which youths of todays are getting easily attracted.
To sum up, in an effort to lead a happier and stress free life it is better to follow the career of dream as well as understanding it should not be harmful to people and society around them .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, so, thus, well, at least, for example, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2330.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28344671202 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88701052343 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575963718821 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 709.2 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 23.0359550562 156% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.069214116 60.3974514979 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.166666667 118.986275619 163% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.75 23.4991977007 156% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 5.21951772744 184% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166942649892 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570253951638 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068707248546 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0772715987082 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0754683084773 0.0667264976115 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 14.1392134831 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.93 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 100.480337079 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 22.0 11.8971910112 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.2143820225 146% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.7820224719 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.