The prompt emphasize about the government allocating it's financial support to the major cities in order to preserve the cultural traditions. The reason asserted behind this is that major cities have been the cradle to civilizations. I agree to the claim to certain extent, however there are few other reasons and locations that can attribute to the birth of cultural traditions.
To begin with, major cities have always been an amalgamation of various ethnicities in and around the locality. It can never be a pure attribute designated to a particular region. Certain traditions are native and most of them are rightly to have been mixed up in course of time. Since, it is in the major cities that people around the world migrate in search of opportunities to run a livelihood. To preserve a culture and a long run tradition, it is always better to identify the prominent oldest city. Oldest cities are the ones supposed to be the monotony for traditions followed by the native people.
Ancient towns and cities require proper fiscal aids from the government. Organizations must be associated to investigate on the traditions and culture specific to the particular region. Specimens and samples collected from Ancient cities must be preserved properly to thrive the culture. Moreover, the citizens must be admonished with serious acts and laws to follow the cultural traditions purported to be endemic to the region. It is of prime importance to protect the cultural heritage found in the ancient cities. There are copious quotidian rituals that are better inscribed on the monuments found in the oldest cities. Hence, It is better to ameliorate the ancient towns, cities of historic importance and cultural heritage with enough fiscal support from the government.
To recapitulate, I disagree to a great extent with the government bolstering only the major cities to preserve the cultural traditions. Reviving the age old cultures require acquiring knowledge about the most ancient cities of the country.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 280, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...o have been mixed up in course of time. Since, it is in the major cities that people ...
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Line 2, column 505, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ' the Oldest'.
Suggestion: The Oldest
... to identify the prominent oldest city. Oldest cities are the ones supposed to be the ...
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Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...the most ancient cities of the country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, to begin with, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 324.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20061728395 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84054429493 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.472222222222 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.6802908099 60.3974514979 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.6111111111 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 23.4991977007 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94444444444 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281992838595 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0917827267536 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667944392762 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186189694561 0.150359130593 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538864205069 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.58 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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