Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
There are a vast majority of people who live in major cities rather than rural areas. Even though cities have more people, it is wrongful to state that they need more financial support to thrive. Rural areas that account for our agricultural sustenance need financial support to thrive. Not to mention, the upkeep of farming and production of crops is physically exhausting. They are the founding fathers of tradition and where the cultural traditions were passed along.
The rural areas that give us our main food groups have to have the means to not only farm, but take care of their families. A farmer’s day would be waking up at 5:00am or earlier, attending to all the animals, attending to all the crop fields, and by doing this hoping he or she can sustain a comfortable life for his or her wife or kids. If farmers were able to gain more cash, then they would have a lighter load. The farmer could pay attention to a specific crop, or even a specific animal because most farmers I know had to have multiple outputs to receive decent income. Some farmers I knew in Oklahoma had a really hard time getting common luxuries without have to go out-of-town for an hour or so.
Not only does crop take a lot of financial stability, but it also is physically demanding. Think of a nurse that is on their feet for 12 hours or more at a time in the day. Now think of a farmer and what he has to do. Both are on their feet, but some may argue that farming is excruciating work and overtime if the farmer develops a back injury or worse, then who is to help them? Aiding the rural areas just makes sense to me.
While major cities harbor museums, rural areas pass on and generate traditions more closely. Since the statement above claims that major cities generate and preserve our traditions, I wanted to counter saying that rural areas are the real starters of tradition. In Oklahoma, we have something called an indian taco. It is all over the city restaurants and people love to get this food item at the fair, but where did the indian taco originate? Whenever the Native Americans were suppressed with little to not food, they had to fry bread as their nutrition source. Over time, they sort of passed this down and changed it from a food with a dark past to a food that everyone loves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'majorities'?
Suggestion: majorities
There are a vast majority of people who live in major cities rath...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 626, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
...of passed this down and changed it from a food with a dark past to a food that everyon...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 653, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
...nged it from a food with a dark past to a food that everyone loves.
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, really, so, then, while, as to, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 417.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.52278177458 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38309465635 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546762589928 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.1764998886 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.8095238095 118.986275619 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.80952380952 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168569852806 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513286484204 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0565457671797 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112965864628 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094796894826 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 14.1392134831 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.