Claim: While boredom is often expressed with a sense of self-satisfaction, it should really be a source of embarrassment.
Reason: Boredom arises from a lack of imagination and self-motivation.
The author claims that boredom should be really a source of embarrassment rather than considering it with a sense of self satisfaction. I firmly agree with the claim for actually 2 reasons.
Self-satisfaction does not actually mean that one needs to be bored to have it. It is actually achieved through hard work and passion and getting something done that is important to our life. For example when a person is passionate about something or a purpose and he works day and night to achieve the goal of the purpose, when he finally achieves it he gets that self satisfaction. The example of Archimedes can be taken into account here. When he was pondering over the miscalculation in the crown of the king he could not sleep or eat for days. He used his imagination and passion to actually get to the depth of the problem and when he actually found out the solution he yelled - "Eureka!!" with joy. That is the real definition of self-satisfaction which can be achieved through hard work, deep passion, utter patience and cerebral imagination. There is no place for boredom to be considered as self-satisfaction, honestly Archimedes was not bored with that problem.
The second reason behind my position is that boredom corresponds to laziness and unwillingness to change the course of daily lives. A bored person is actually doing nothing in the name of boredom where life is too short to be bored with. Basically he lacks self-motivation to do something for his own good or to change his present condition. A bored person will randomly blame his fate for any inconvenient situation, showing no interest in any kind of practical solution. So boredom can not be considered as self-satisfaction rather it is actually destroying the potential of a human being making him unwilling and washing out any self-motivation that is left. A self-motivated person will always remain thirsty to learn new things, to do something better, to plan his tasks with more care and he will always welcome any inconvenient situations and make the best use of it unlike a person who is just bored.
So to conclude, it can be inferred from many practical examples that self-motivation comes from the willingness of a person to do something. The pursuit of happiness is really achieved when a person finally gets what he has been working for with perseverence. A bored person simply can not feel that self-satisfaction ever. He will just remain motionless while blaming everything.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, honestly, if, really, second, so, while, for example, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 414.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98550724638 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23208440092 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504830917874 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.6140668943 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.2 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.301235997248 0.243740707755 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103499657589 0.0831039109588 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101840485845 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227625230727 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0987213813899 0.0667264976115 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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