College students should be encouraged to pursue subjects that interest them rather than the courses that seem most likely to lead to jobs.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
“Real success is achieved only by following the passion, not by money.” Infact a person can live a jovial and affluent life only when he converts passion to work. The prompt suggests that students should be motivated towards the subject that lies inside their heart but not for the subject that fixes the job in near future. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that students should follow their heart while choosing their courses for two reasons:
Job availability in apex is ephemeral. So, choosing your study in accordance to job demand is nothing but foolishness. For instance, in 2015, Nepal had faced a high magnitude of earthquake, due to which tremendous number of houses, buildings and real estate properties were destroyed. Later on, the demand for civil engineer reached very high. The engineers were hired in very high packages. But nowadays lots of civil engineers don’t have proper job. Students who choosed civil engineering at that time, looking at the huge job opportunities are mostly frustrated nowadays due to lack of sufficient jobs. This situation illustrates that job market is short lived and students are ruining their life by choosing their career in accordance to job demands.
Further, even though job market is not dynamic as weather change in Pokhara, students should stick to their interest as happiness level becomes significant in working according to the interest. For instance, If MS Dhoni had focused on engineering -which Is believed as secure future career in India - by not following his passion then he would never have been the great cricket player. He took risk to look his inside rather than looking outside by not following the trend. Similarly, students also should discover their interest and passion which, in last make them happy along with success.
Of course, in this globalized world, there is a lot of competition to get highly paid job. Unemployment is increasing day by day. Seemingly, students should focus on courses that lead to a secure job but in reality, only following the inner interest lead them to get proper job and inner satisfaction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... choosing their courses for two reasons: Job availability in apex is ephemeral. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, similarly, so, then, while, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1784.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 351.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08262108262 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62801750021 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.57264957265 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2188144788 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.941176471 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6470588235 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203635800885 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620047957932 0.0831039109588 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587977596849 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127635253856 0.150359130593 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03095433487 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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