Studies have majorly become ‘rat-race’ instead of source of learning. Where one tends to step over another in order to score higher than to increase the intellect of their interest. As the prompt suggests that the quality of learning be it on any level has seen major decline due to this so-called competition. I strongly agree to the above prompt for focusing on the quality rather than the relative grading to achieve the goal (Higher CGPA per say) for two reasons.
For instance, Institution plays a big role to set the mind set of leaners aka students on which side they want to be on, if the university lets say builds the curriculum in such a way which forces the students to focus on marks rather than what the topic itself is, students tend to digress from the main agenda of the education and tend to get stuck on the loop of different techniques or shortcuts to just get the answer in order to climb up the ladder rather than focusing on what exactly the course’s motive is, they start lacking in the application side of it as they dropped the point of real life scenarios and give their undivided attention to the Ranks and the final short lived outcome. And that’s the reason they are good are cramming up the topics rather than the plumb knowledge which would have helped them to be best that what ever they do. Competition in knowledge doesn’t make any sense on an ideal level.
Another reason is that the load that institution puts on students with amount of coursework like, Partical, assignments, lab, thesis etc. makes then loose interest in the course itself as they wont be able to dive into depth of each course work rather just scrap the surface and it then becomes the internal race between students as to who can memorize the formulas and paste it on the exam sheet, loosing the quality it again and that explains the reason why all of graduates fail in interviews of companies because they never focused on what they are learning rather on how much they memorized.
Although one might argue that in this vast community of people competition is essential for let say companies in ivy league colleges to get the cream of the students but they miss the point healthy competition is necessary not on the cost of the knowledge they gain on quality and in depth education. To conclude, Competition is important for knowledge not for higher grades. Which will help the students to excel in their respective career
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at-race’ instead of source of learning. Where one tends to step over another in order...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...crease the intellect of their interest. As the prompt suggests that the quality of...
^^
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to be'
Suggestion: to be
...t suggests that the quality of learning be it on any level has seen major decline ...
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Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: PER_SE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'per se' (=by itself, by themselves)?
Suggestion: per se
...grading to achieve the goal Higher CGPA per say for two reasons. For instance, Inst...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: LOOSING_EFFORTRECORDSEASON[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...ormulas and paste it on the exam sheet, loosing the quality it again and that explains the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt for knowledge not for higher grades. Which will help the students to excel in thei...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents to excel in their respective career
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, as to, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72558139535 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4587027143 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 185.569150783 60.3974514979 307% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 169.333333333 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.8333333333 23.4991977007 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14475957447 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612166916565 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621518648671 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956221991089 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477770512985 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Where” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at-race’ instead of source of learning. Where one tends to step over another in order...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 183, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...crease the intellect of their interest. As the prompt suggests that the quality of...
^^
Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to be'
Suggestion: to be
...t suggests that the quality of learning be it on any level has seen major decline ...
^^
Line 1, column 442, Rule ID: PER_SE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'per se' (=by itself, by themselves)?
Suggestion: per se
...grading to achieve the goal Higher CGPA per say for two reasons. For instance, Inst...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: LOOSING_EFFORTRECORDSEASON[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...ormulas and paste it on the exam sheet, loosing the quality it again and that explains the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 377, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nt for knowledge not for higher grades. Which will help the students to excel in thei...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 441, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents to excel in their respective career
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, as to, for instance, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 430.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72558139535 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4587027143 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 23.0359550562 152% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 185.569150783 60.3974514979 307% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 169.333333333 118.986275619 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.8333333333 23.4991977007 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.08333333333 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14475957447 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0612166916565 0.0831039109588 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621518648671 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0956221991089 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477770512985 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.1392134831 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.8420337079 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.75 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.2143820225 143% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.