Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of
study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the
most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your
position.
Time and again, development of brand new technology has thrown us into deeper and deeper troughs of social values and cultures. Modernization has changed the way we think, act and behave in society. Social media has made us more taciturn than gregarious. Cities, which are the most vulnerable to these paradigm shifts are hit the hardest in these terms. They shift quite dramatically from established values and traditions as a result of these changes and hence have no or vague representation of the society. Rural areas and small towns on the other hand remain cut-off from this modern technology and hence are impervious to tradition shifts. Thus to understand the characteristics of a society, it’s important to important to understand its rural areas and small towns.
In the modern world with the advent of world wide web, major cities across the globe seem to have coalesced as a single unit exchanging all kinds of information. With a click of a mouse a person sitting in new Delhi can access the daily lifestyle of Paris which is thousands of miles away. The latest change in living standard emerges in the cities first. Film industry in Mumbai controls the dressing style in Delhi. Thus cities are highly susceptible to any change in culture and traditions. However rural areas on the other hand are cut-off from the cities lacking the modern technology. The general populace residing the rural areas and small towns go on living their lives following the good old conventional traditions and cultures. If a society has prayer rituals, then it is reflected by its people living in villages and not the people living in cities who in turn atheists following the popular culture. The behavioral aspects of the society is evident in the people interacting among themselves which is easily observed in villages not in cities of today where families live in seclusion and grow apathetic to the world having more facebook friends than real friends! It is a general trend nowadays that villages preserve traditions and culture it has inherited whereas city dwellers take pride in moving away from their culture as a symbol of modernization. Thus a society’s idiosyncrasy is rightly reflected by its rural areas and small towns.
Nevertheless, there are evidences supporting the fact that cities imbibe some of the society’s most important traits. Throughout history we have encountered several civilizations develop and most of them flourished around a certain city which characterized its intrinsic cultures and traditions. Roman civilization was evidently reflected by the city of Rome until migrants from different countries adulterated it. Harappan civilization was reflected by the city of Harappa. Ancient cities very well reflected societies characteristics. Thus it is worthwhile to study the cities if we want to understand the characteristics of an ancient society. In modern times, cities no more are the virtue of the society. Now that transportation has become quite accessible, cities have been amalgamated with diverse ingredients of countless number of cities. Each individual has his/her own way of living their life. In this chaos the native characteristics of the society is lost. Thus it is futile to spend time understanding the cities to understand the society.
In conclusion, we see that modernization has cost us the extinction of our traditions and cultures from our cities. But not everything is lost. Villages and small towns which are still not completely shadowed by technology still have society’s traditions and cultures preserved.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 468, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... result of these changes and hence have no or vague representation of the society....
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nce are impervious to tradition shifts. Thus to understand the characteristics of a ...
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Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'important to'.
Suggestion: important to
...characteristics of a society, it's important to important to understand its rural areas and small to...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...i controls the dressing style in Delhi. Thus cities are highly susceptible to any ch...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...r culture as a symbol of modernization. Thus a society's idiosyncrasy is rightl...
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Suggestion: some
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...ll reflected societies characteristics. Thus it is worthwhile to study the cities if...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...characteristics of the society is lost. Thus it is futile to spend time understandin...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...os;s traditions and cultures preserved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, then, thus, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.4196629213 8% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3025.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 573.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27923211169 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89258810929 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0069144581 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 215.323595506 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.483420593368 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 948.6 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 73.4437144237 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5806451613 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4838709677 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38709677419 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.83258426966 269% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0822792375567 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0205848918553 0.0831039109588 25% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299660648983 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.059674718618 0.150359130593 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0105256324465 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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