Educators should find out what students want included in the curriculum and then offer it to them.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The author suggests that the curriculum or the study plan of the school should be made according to the precedence of the students. I agree with the contention up to a point that the courses prepared based on the student's desire will incite enthusiasm on the students and the system of learning could become better. However, the assertion leaves out a huge part of burden to the economy of the country and heterogeneous system that could be formed if this technique is implemented which forced me to take a dual stand for my view on the prompt.
To begin, I concede that an education curriculum prepared taking the student's choices on consideration can become a huge leap forward to better the learning system. Every human being comprises of varying opinion, talents, and interest on what they seek to do. The prevailing common curriculum prevents the students to study the subjects they wish. For instance, in most of the developing countries, the schools do not have any music, dance or sports classes. Students inclined to do these activities are forced to consider these as extracurricular. This has hindered the whole generation to participate or to learn the things they desire. However, developed countries have made progress in this respect trying to accommodate several courses as per the children's request. And we see the result of the acceptance of this new model clearly. The children in those country have thrived in the career they chose as the curriculum in the school. So, to respect and expand the curriculum as per the student's desire can become a boon to the education field.
Furthermore, whenever any person gets chance to learn according to their demand or wish, they tend to show more enthusiasm in the topic. If the whole curriculum is based on each student's desire, then their learning interest will increase naturally and can further help to elevate their career as well as the nation's future.
However, the curriculum comprising the vast criteria and subjects can become an economic burden to the country. When we try to accommodate every person's desire, they are not just limited to drama, acting, dance, singing, or sports, they extend toward numerous other fields such as handicrafts, sculpting, fashion, and many more. If the government tried to concede to every demand, then no amount of money would be sufficient. Even the developed countries who are trying to achieve this are able to do it in a minimal amount. The developing countries will need a lot more time to complete this project. Not only the government, even if the education of the school is funded by private sector, the children themselves cannot afford to continue on all their wishes and only a semi-fulfilled desire might do more damage than provide advantage.
Moreover, this method of preparing curriculum can create a heterogeneous environment with no common view point, no similar grounds as every person will have varying interests. Every people will want to achieve their desire and there might become scarcity of manpower in all the fields as people will be divided to varying field. This will directly affect the countries' condition in a bad way rather than to improve it.
To sum up, I admit that the author's vision is beneficial to create a better place where every child can learn what they desire. However, the inability of the government and the children themselves to afford the system and the imbalance society that might be created could become a massive problem to the world.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
... the learning system. Every human being comprises of varying opinion, talents, and interest ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...henever any person gets chance to learn according to their demand or wish, they tend to s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...directly affect the countries condition in a bad way rather than to improve it. To sum up, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for instance, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2915.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98290598291 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68365506897 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471794871795 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 915.3 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0518088251 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.115384615 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939865532064 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274711461248 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281301733128 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515540223995 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03975215001 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 183, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
... the learning system. Every human being comprises of varying opinion, talents, and interest ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...henever any person gets chance to learn according to their demand or wish, they tend to s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 379, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a bad way" with adverb for "bad"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...directly affect the countries condition in a bad way rather than to improve it. To sum up, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for instance, such as, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2915.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 585.0 442.535393258 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98290598291 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.55969084622 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68365506897 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471794871795 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 915.3 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0518088251 60.3974514979 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.115384615 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0939865532064 0.243740707755 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0274711461248 0.0831039109588 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0281301733128 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0515540223995 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.03975215001 0.0667264976115 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 100.480337079 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.