this essay topic was given in Manhattan 5lb book for GRE. That's why I attempted it. It would be great If you can grade it. The question says write a response in which you discuss to which extent you agree or disagree with the claim.
Claim: Luck plays more of a role in determining success than work ethics does.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the luck plays more role in determining success or the work ethics.
Indisputably the luck plays an important role in determining the outcome in whatever one does. Nevertheless, work ethic plays major and determining role in success as work ethic can make you try harder for every work you do but if one becomes fatalist then he or she will always remain dependent on the luck. Thus I generally disagree with the opinion that that luck is determining factor in the attainment of the success and would argue that it plays the major role in someone's life accomplishments.
First of all, to get success in life, there are numerous things.I would like to point out that perseverance is the must ingredient of success.
To illustrate this, let us take the example of SpaceX's trying to launch their rockets, they got success in their third try, maybe we can say that luck played major role but it is their perseverance and hard work to try the third time in the row.In this circumstance, obviously, If they had lost their motivation and reduced their efforts in their work. There would have been no success in their work. Consequently, it is pretty much obvious that in the above example work ethic played the major role in the success than just luck.
Furthermore, we can see many individuals failing even after putting everything they can to get success in their field.
Specifically, I would like to take the example of a sportsman, they practice each and every day. But sometimes on the day of the performance, they cannot perform or do their best in competitions. Both common sense and past experience have told us that if they give up or reduce their quality of work ethics than they will get nothing in the future too. Hence all the evidence above demonstrates that it is the efforts we put in not just the luck that matters in getting the things we want in our life.
Admittedly, if there is no luck on your side, no matter what you do you will fail, in whatever you do in your life. This is true, especially when one is being a fatalist, and running their race on luck only. In addition, to this, it is often said that "success is when luck meets hard work". However, all the above arguments do not constitute to support the evidence to claim that luck is the only major factor to determine the success.
In conclusion, being dependent on luck for success would not be success formula but hard work and consistency is.
As long some other measurements and some other areas are involved luck will always be behind the work ethic in terms of which success can be attained. In fact, work ethics can do the work in this world which someone dependent on luck only can't do
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- this essay topic was given in Manhattan 5lb book for GRE. That's why I attempted it. It would be great If you can grade it. The question says write a response in which you discuss to which extent you agree or disagree with the claim.Claim: Luck plays more 50
- Write a response in which you discuss to which extent you agree or disagree with the claim.Claim: Luck plays more of a role in determining success than work ethics does. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...cess in life, there are numerous things.I would like to point out that perseveran...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...d work to try the third time in the row.In this circumstance, obviously, If they h...
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Line 8, column 218, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experience'.
Suggestion: experience
... in competitions. Both common sense and past experience have told us that if they give up or re...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...hey will get nothing in the future too. Hence all the evidence above demonstrates tha...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ld which someone dependent on luck only cant do
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, then, third, thus, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 33.0505617978 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2264.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66804123711 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60468768126 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449484536082 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.7744890711 60.3974514979 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.2 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.25 23.4991977007 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.21951772744 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.97078651685 181% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168637668809 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0604284217826 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0411917857184 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0844265271241 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0537760925985 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 48.8420337079 131% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.37 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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