The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Walnut Grove town newspaper.
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"Walnut Grove's town council has advocated switching from EZ Disposal (which has had the
contract for trash collection services in Walnut Grove for the past ten years) to ABC Waste,
because EZ recently raised its monthly fee from $2,000 to $2,500 a month, whereas ABC's fee
is still $2,000. But the town council is mistaken; we should continue using EZ. EZ collects trash
twice a week, while ABC collects only once. Moreover, EZ---which, like ABC, currently has a
fleet of 20 trucks---has ordered additional trucks. Finally, EZ provides exceptional service: 80
percent of respondents to last year's town survey agreed that they were 'satisfied' with EZ's
performance."
This editorial recommends that people of Walnut Grove should switch to ABC Waste from EZ Disposal which has increased its monthly fees by 25 percent for trash collection. But the author is against this decision of the council
stating several reasons to stick to EZ Disposal. To support his argument he mentions that EZ collects garbage twice a week as compared to only once a week by ABC. He also states that EZ has ordered additional trucks for garbage collection.
The author also cites a survey in which 80% of the respondents showed support for EZ and were satisfied with their performance. These arguments might look convincing at first glance but there's no substancial evidence given
to outweigh the the council's decision.
First and foremost, the author does not prove that the number of people who responded to the survey represents thoughts of overall population of the town. It could be possible that only a few number of people took part in the survey
and were co-incidently in favour of EZ Disposal. In the absence of evidence to supoort that survey was taken by majority of the people it is hard to take author's argument seriously.
Moreover even if EZ disposal collects garbade twice a week, there's not guarantee that it is more efficient than ABC Disposal. There could be myriad of reasons as to why council would have advocated to switch to ABC.
For example, the workers at EZ disposal might be taking frequent leaves and due to that people are not able to dispose of their wastes when required. ABC on the other hand might have a record of punctual workers
who might be consistently following all the guidelines into consideration for disposal of the waste. In that case increase in price by EZ would further supports council's recommendation to switch to ABC.
In addition, the author does not mention how many new trucks EZ would be adding to its fleet and are the trucks at both the service providers of comparable efficiency and size. If trucks at ABC are much bigger
and each of them can carry waste materials almost double of what EZ can carry per truck then increasing the fleet size by EZ would not have much impact on its service improvement.
If the author would have given support and proper evidence against the above arguments then it would have been persuasive. But due to lack of evidence his argument is unconvincing as it stands. To make a strong point
he must prove that survey represented opinion of the majority of the town.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, as to, for example, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2079.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85747663551 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59703802742 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481308411215 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5762222563 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.421052632 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5263157895 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 4.97078651685 262% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182583536134 0.243740707755 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562370437194 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596190819036 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0677774465208 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0637475441307 0.0667264976115 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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