Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The prompt says that formal education limits the student’s mind and his/her spirits. However, I strongly disagree with the prompt. The formal education has formidable benefits if compared to the informal one, particularly to whom in young age, for the following reasons.
First, formal education has benefits as it is systematic, standardized, and it has trained teachers. The student during his/her study years learns and acquires experience to choose the appropriate educational way which is suitable for his/her skills. Without helping such a systematic education system; the student won’t be able to recognize the strength and weakness areas. For example, at formal education, teachers are trained to teach the students different aspects of subjects which deal with life sciences, history, mathematics, and biology. All these different subjects are essential to the students for understanding the world science and different fields. Therefore, the students will able to discern their strong areas and which field they want to continue. Quite the opposite, in informal education, the student has the freedom to choose any subjects. Some of the students at the young ages wouldn’t have the awareness to choose which subject is suitable for their skills. In addition, in informal education, some teachers are not be educated and trained to deal with different ages of students and as a result, they will not be efficient to advise each student what commensurate him/her.
Second, in informal education, the student learns how to be a commitment as this type of education is organized and supervised by the government. For example, formal education is based on classroom attendance and if the student exceeded the allowed absence hours or days; he will be affected and his final grades. Therefore, the formal education helps the student to be committed and follow the guidelines and this will not limit the student’s spirit, on the contrast, this kind of organization help the student to be ordered and discover more about his skills.
In conclusion, formal education let the student find out his/her strong areas by studying different backgrounds and then can choose which area has a passion for it. And by the following the guidelines of the formal education, the student will learn how to organize his life and gives his mind more room to creative.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 865, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...has the freedom to choose any subjects. Some of the students at the young ages wouldn’t hav...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 998, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... suitable for their skills. In addition, in informal education, some teachers are...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29521276596 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8009637783 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473404255319 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4834518616 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.117647059 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1176470588 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116587217406 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05218665923 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269004272114 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894910029135 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243341529219 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 865, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...has the freedom to choose any subjects. Some of the students at the young ages wouldn’t hav...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 998, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... suitable for their skills. In addition, in informal education, some teachers are...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, then, therefore, as for, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1991.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29521276596 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8009637783 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473404255319 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4834518616 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.117647059 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1176470588 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.21951772744 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116587217406 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.05218665923 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0269004272114 0.0758088955206 35% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894910029135 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0243341529219 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.