Every person loves their nation and wanted to see their countries entitled with a great nation. In the given prompt an author assumes that title of a great nation can be obtained by a triumph of its rulers, artists, or scientists because achievement by its elite ensures a quality life for most of the national citizen. However, an author does not provide a definition of great nation. For me, a definition of a great nation is a nation which is popular all around the world and where citizens are having good life along with their voice, conventional or unconventional, is heard. Taking this definition, I accede, to some extent, with the claim and reason because the achievement of elites makes their country popular across the world and can make the life of the citizen prosperous and happy, but it does not always produce the desired outcome.
Feats of the ruler, artists, or scientists not only make them popular in surrounding setting but also all across the world. From the evolution of human civilization, we are hearing the stories of the grandeur tasks, authentic or unauthentic, performed by elites. As we hear these stories, we, directly or indirectly, link them with their nation, making these nations popular all across the world. For instance, when we discuss Napoleon Bonaparte, we directly think of France or about Shakespeare, it remind us about England. Thus, achievement of the nation elites makes their country popular which is one of the essential attributes of great nations.
Achievements of these elites may also upgrade the people’s lives. Scientific innovation and discoveries, implementation of policies by a ruler can be beneficial to the citizen. We can take the example of the steam engine invented by James Watt which leads England to the path of industrialized era. Due to this industrialization, people of England, at that time, were having a good income that enhances their living standard. Similarly, allowing voting rights to Negro by Lyndon B Johnson created a sense of equality among US citizen. The triumph of a country ruler, artists or scientist can be used as emblematic of the great nation as they can enhance quality of people life.
However, the achievement cannot always be an indicator of people having a good life. The ruler can cause afflict citizen to make his/her vision successful. You can take an example of Alexander. Even though he is most celebrated emperor, citizen during his period of time was mostly besieged with war. Similarly, the scientific innovation can also cause a tremor to the country own citizen. The most striking example is a development of nuclear weapon: The US citizen fear, which was patently manifested during the cold war between the US and the Soviet Union, from the unconventional warfare; however, the US was the first country to develop and test an atomic bomb. Thus, the country citizens are not always benefited by the achievement of these elites.
In conclusion, the country can be well known due to the achievement of their leader, artist, and ruler. Their achievement can also provide benefit to their citizen; however, it can also afflict their citizen due to their achievement.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2663.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 525.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07238095238 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81263749979 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468571428571 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 841.5 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.2358768606 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.52 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.84 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.263486242596 0.243740707755 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818614868269 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0946089840536 0.0758088955206 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14780348919 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112252723737 0.0667264976115 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.