Everyone's life time seems trivial compared with the history of human-beings. People share the world by different times.Some one has live for a long time while still anonymous to the world, while someone's appearance shocked the world just for sesonds. When we discuss the greatness of individuals, it still works no matter whether he/she is alived. It depends on the contributions of the one to the world when we evaluate his/her greatness.
Someone got famous after life like Van Gogh. whose painting amazing the world. After his death, the art field discovered his excelence in painting, meanwhile found his life suffered during he was alive. No body except Van Gogh could conceive the pain when he shot himself, the pity artist was still nobody when that bullet went through his chest.After his death, his famous paintings were celebrated worldly. Even rencently the moment that he shot himself was filmed as a way people commemorate him. His painting,however, is the valueless work of human, he is remembered by us all the time.
Someone, on the other hand, celebrated during lifetime for his/her contributions to the world. There are so many famous people in this case. Albert Eistein, Stephen Hawking, even J.K Rollin I suppose, they made great success when they are and they were alive. This is the luckiness for the human-beings then as we are and we were living in the age of masters. Still we should not forget the present, recently the Nature revealed the 10 greastest scientists in the world in 2018, the most famous one, Cao Yang, who specialized in carbon materials attracted people's concerntrations. He invented a kind of materials used in elctricity-car battries will double the distance of the vechile can drive.
Great people's stories vary in different ways, as the essay metions, there is another kind of someone who celebrated during liftime while totally infamed after death. I believe it is not the way people evaluated the celebrities changed while the celebrities really made the wrongdoings by their lifetimes, and their individual histories were debunked by the people after them. Let's talk about Stalin, the Leader of CCCP. When we won the WAR II, Stalin began to excute the people who did not listen to him, while nobody was willing to fight against him in Russia as he was the leader, even China, then little brother of CCCP, the Government was also under great pressure by the power of Stalin. After his death, people were so angry with him by his crime, his tomb and body was detroyed, the history recorded this story , russian people will never forget.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...etroyed, the history recorded this story , russian people will never forget.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, really, so, still, then, while, i suppose, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 33.0505617978 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 58.6224719101 87% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2162.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 434.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98156682028 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62133889921 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552995391705 0.4932671777 112% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.9914251625 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.952380952 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6666666667 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42857142857 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0756121683974 0.243740707755 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0244222943862 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241828219536 0.0758088955206 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0499494074341 0.150359130593 33% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224275790564 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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