I agree with the notion that students' curriculum should be uniform across the board as far as possible. Whatever is taught to students before they enter college forms their foundation and determines how they think and tackle issues later on in life. Some might argue that contrary to college education, high school syllabus is elementary and inconsequential. In my opinion this approach is false and undermines the role that primary education plays in moulding young minds.
If the curriculum were diverse, the youth would tend to get grouped up based on the difficulty levels of the various curricula. This, combined with students' personal motivations and interests, could adversely skew their goals and ambitions. Maintaining the difficulty level of multiple curricula across the country would be an onerous task, not to mention designing of tests of uniform diffculty that can be administered to students from different academic backgrounds. College admission committees could very easily become biased toward a students from a certain curriculum if those students prove to be better performers in college and beyond.
Having the same national curriculum ensures that the knowledge dispensed to children is uniform. It sets the tone for a students lives as it empowers them to figure out what it is that they want to study in college, and subsequently, what they want to build a career in. From a nations development point-of-view, it is not hard to imagine that job markets in industry, politics, and even academia would have a hard time seeking talented graduates, as one section of the population might become more or desirable than another based on the kind of knowledge that was imparted to them in school.
Thus, I believe that in order to avoid a butterfly effect that could upturn a nations future for the worse, it is crucial to have a uniform curriculum throughout.
I agree with the notion that students' curriculum should be uniform across the board as far as possible. Whatever is taught to students before they enter college forms their foundation and determines how they think and tackle issues later on in life. Some might argue that contrary to college education, high school syllabus is elementary and inconsequential. In my opinion this approach is false and undermines the role that primary education plays in moulding young minds.
If the curriculum were diverse, the youth would tend to get grouped up based on the difficulty levels of the various curricula. This, combined with students' personal motivations and interests, could adversely skew their goals and ambitions. Maintaining the difficulty level of multiple curricula across the country would be an onerous task, not to mention designing of tests of uniform diffculty that can be administered to students from different academic backgrounds. College admission committees could very easily become biased toward a students from a certain curriculum if those students prove to be better performers in college and beyond.
Having the same national curriculum ensures that the knowledge dispensed to children is uniform. It sets the tone for a students lives as it empowers them to figure out what it is that they want to study in college, and subsequently, what they want to build a career in. From a nations development point-of-view, it is not hard to imagine that job markets in industry, politics, and even academia would have a hard time seeking talented graduates, as one section of the population might become more or desirable than another based on the kind of knowledge that was imparted to them in school.
Thus, I believe that in order to avoid a butterfly effect that could upturn a nations future for the worse, it is crucial to have a uniform curriculum throughout.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 30, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
I agree with the notion that students curriculum should be uniform across the...
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Line 5, column 539, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: a student; students
... could very easily become biased toward a students from a certain curriculum if those stud...
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Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
... they want to build a career in. From a nations development point-of-view, it is not ha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 2235.4752809 71% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18954248366 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83348975452 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59477124183 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2258431486 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.333333333 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.41666666667 5.21951772744 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.437920578603 0.243740707755 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153174686465 0.0831039109588 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.207649005066 0.0758088955206 274% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.239306643968 0.150359130593 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.23879859598 0.0667264976115 358% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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