Every individual has their worthy goals in different phrase of the life, and pursuit and achievement of goals could reflect own values and the sense of existence. However, worthy goals can be regarded as getting higher grades in finals, being enrolled in the most famous university all over the world, making most fortune, and so on. Worthy goals could be achieved without surpassing bottom line of moral standards, disciplines, and law regulation, meaning that valuable goals are not supposed to be accomplished in unjustifiable ways.
In the schooling stage, teenagers grow up to forge self-respect and self-esteem. For coming true their success or goals, they must not hurt others and breach school disciplines. Never would they be reckoned as excellent students if they utilize unethical ways to achieve it. For example, higher grades are the most practical goal for school children. Some choose to cheat, which makes them discredited and humiliated along with severe punishment of educational institutions. Therefore, unreasonable ways to achieve worthy goal is strictly banned.
Besides, stepping into the society, people would face hardship including family raising and promotion. These worthy goals must be attained by not challenging own physical limitation and hurting colleague interest and recognition. For example, currently, people in the age of 30 or 40s who live in Beijing generally pay mortgage monthly in 20,000 Yuan. They are forced to work overnight to accumulate more money to pay bills of mortgage, tuition of children, Yoga classes, and grocery expenditure. Although making more money is the most urgent issue most debtors ought to address, they should not challenge physical excess, such as sleep less than six hours per day, to attain that goal. If does, they would suffer incurable disease like cancers or cardiac arrest frequent sleep deprivation triggers. Another issue most employee might confront is to whether there are available to get promoted. Supposing all manager candidates are excellent enough, some malicious candidate delivers others’ drawback to boss, eventually influencing boss’s objective judgement and sifting results. It is in no breach of physical limitation and moral standards that achieving worthy goals are rational and permitted.
At the same time, in politics, politicians strive for being elected to the President, which are aspirational and courageous. However, they cannot come to it infamously considering that they would be impeached and disqualified. The most visible example is the Watergate issue committed by Richard Nixon. He, to win the presidential election, conspired to steal the classified election files of the Democratic in the Watergate Hall, suffering criticism from their rivals and citizens and disqualification. No matter how glory the goal brings, anyone cannot be irrational and even jeopardize others.
To conclude it, attaining higher grades, making more money and promotion, and becoming a president are desirable for different individuals in different phrases, but legitimate boundaries are not allowed to be surpassed. Otherwise, these goals, despite being obtained, are not worthy any more.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, however, if, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2715.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 484.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.60950413223 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9000103335 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 215.323595506 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611570247934 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 831.6 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.1019112677 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.6 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.36 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.48 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813643221867 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0238619772328 0.0831039109588 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248482512611 0.0758088955206 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0487603450901 0.150359130593 32% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0136326864319 0.0667264976115 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.1392134831 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 12.1639044944 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 167.0 100.480337079 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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