Issue Topic: The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agre

Focusing on teamwork is a basical requirement for the leaders as the affairs of a large instittue always completed by a group of people.While we should not narrow down the requirements for leaders because there are other important skills like the ability of competition. The youth are the future of a nation, enterprise and many areas. Most of the leaders got excercised in different ways when they were young.
So the young people should experince and learn more to get cultivatied oneself in different fileds.

Due to the complexity of the society, there are more and more competition in different areas, like the economy competition between the countries, and more commmonly in business, the enterprise chasing for profit is also the competeitoins in the market. There are lots of car brands which means serious competition in vehiecle industry. The leadership in large agency like the governments and companies need metabolism for new blood, as the old on the stage is not an everlasting condition, they were also once youngers. So there are lots of challenges waiting for the young. Thus the competition is essential to them becasue in this way the one who cannot take the reposibility of learship will be expelled. The young people will gain the places in the business or goverments by winnning the competitions.

The competitions will bring more passion and productivty. For example, in the business, if the the company hired a group of new-bies, to explore the market, the best way to sift thes apprentice is to make a KPI on them , in the next few months,these new comers will work as busy as bees to justify he/she can be the best choice of the job. And in the future these who evalutate the importance of competitions will make more progress and finally go to the leadership

What's more,the requirments of the leaderships are not only the cooperations and competitions. Someone may say that we must emphasize the value of teamwork as individuals can not control large goverments and companies.While in my mind , as one leader on the stage means he is not a group of people, he should lead the people to follow him to get things done. That is the essence of leadership. Cooperation is an essential requirement do not mean it is all.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: While
...e always completed by a group of people.While we should not narrow down the requireme...
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...e the ability of competition. The youth are the future of a nation, enterprise and ...
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...tion, enterprise and many areas. Most of the leaders got excercised in different ...
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Suggestion: Thus,
...ts of challenges waiting for the young. Thus the competition is essential to them be...
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...tivty. For example, in the business, if the the company hired a group of new-bies, to e...
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Suggestion: While
... control large goverments and companies.While in my mind , as one leader on the stage...
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...overments and companies.While in my mind , as one leader on the stage means he is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, may, so, thus, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1871.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 382.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89790575916 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96331625351 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507853403141 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 704.065955056 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.1709661742 60.3974514979 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.9375 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.21951772744 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152249530722 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0507966917897 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349718597373 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793894710778 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358920599209 0.0667264976115 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 100.480337079 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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