The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
A popular view our society has on hardship, luxury and strength is easily summarised in the famous quote by Walt Disney; “All the adversity i’ve had in my life, all my troubles and obstacles have strengthened me. You may not realise it when it happens but a kick in the tooth may be the best thing in the world for you.” Its generally accepted that adversity develops our mettle and strength. It is therefore not surprising that many believe the luxuries we are recently afforded do not aid us become strong, independent people. I however disagree with this notion for two reasons.
To begin with, having certain luxuries have given us the peace and comfort and hence, fertile ground we need to develop into the best versions of ourselves. Take for instance the convenience of a student comfortably boarding the school bus to the local high school each day, having the electricity to study at night, being able to advertise his small car washing service online and carrying out a conversation with a mentor on Linkedin. These things may not make one brawny but still do build ones strength and help one develop values and principles that makes one able to simultaneously stand on their own and help uphold humanity as a whole. A student for example, may then, be able to develop himself into a scientist who will help cure a disease like cancer due to the conveniences he’s afforded.
Additionally, the luxuries we now enjoy have helped alleviate the oppression that was prevalent in various places in the past. The internet, affordable housing, accessible courts and police officers, have helped to free people from the clutch of evil dictators and miscreants which have in turn given people the strength of mind to believe in themselves and develop themselves. The internet, for instance, has exposed a lot of injustices that were being carried out on people who merely wanted their basic rights and has helped people gain support in their fight for their freedoms. Also people who would have alternatively lived in fear of pillage can now have the freedom to develop themselves into strong, independent individuals.
People who believe our luxuries make us weaker and dependent normally propose that human beings by nature adapt to their environment and that we are headed towards a state where we are totally dependent on technology and can do nothing for ourselves. I however think that as we solve the problems of the past and new problems arise, we should be prepared to solve these problems. The way to do this however is not to develop ourselves to ensure that we can handle problems of the past but to adapt for the problems of tomorrow.
Human beings have come a long way; from hunting and gathering to mechanised farming, foodstuffs delivered to doorsteps and heating at the turn of a knob. These luxuries we have built however do not detract from our strength but are however accessories we are using to tackle new problems.
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- The luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning f 79
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 496, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to do'
Suggestion: to do
...e the luxuries we are recently afforded do not aid us become strong, independent p...
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Line 3, column 494, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... not make one brawny but still do build ones strength and help one develop values an...
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Line 3, column 654, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lp uphold humanity as a whole. A student for example, may then, be able to develo...
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Line 4, column 583, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...port in their fight for their freedoms. Also people who would have alternatively liv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, therefore, for example, for instance, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2468.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 502.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91633466135 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65750789589 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519920318725 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.0510301171 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.176470588 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5294117647 23.4991977007 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11764705882 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14760473277 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510312257416 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358344085948 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0799065447008 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420858485795 0.0667264976115 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.1392134831 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 100.480337079 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.