The main benefit of the study of history is to dispel the illusion that people living now are significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.
There is a well-known memo in Bible that says like this: “There are no new things under sun”, which claims that no matter how circumstances, time or anything else change, what we see or what we act are all had happened before. And people who study history also often make the same announcement: “People living now are not significantly different from people who lived in earlier times.” As far as I am concerned, I am completely disagree with this view, and I have substantial reasons to bolster my point.
At first, obviously, there are so many significant advances had happened in material world. No matter how obstinate, banal or talented, you cannot deny human has discovered or invented so many vital and astonishing achievements which are totally strange for those people who lived in 2000 years ago. Take, for example, those digital devices which has grown entwined with our modern life. People cannot imagine how hard our daily life would become if they are separated from those high-tech devices. And this is the main difference which lays on between modern human life and history human life.
Additionally, along with those great developments around human living, ourselves also changed dramatically. Which includes how we think and deal with some basic thoughts and problems. Actually, we have to admit that it is those mind changes has shaped civilized human society. For example, slavery has been existed for a long time in human`s history and people take it granted and lawful in those days. But normal sense and history books have taught us that it is shameful for human to have those dark days. It is exactly history told us that we are living a totally different era compared to those days which keeping slaves is lawful.
In conclusion, I hold a disparate view when it comes to that people living now are not significantly different from people who lived in earlier times. Especially for those ones who study history. I think it should be a common sense for historians to agree with the contrary view. Which is that our society and living standards have changed dramatically compared to old days and we should cherish those changes and take a lesson from history to make more grand changes.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 450, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'disagreed'.
Suggestion: disagreed
... far as I am concerned, I am completely disagree with this view, and I have substantial ...
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Message: Did you mean 'lies on'?
Suggestion: lies on
.... And this is the main difference which lays on between modern human life and history ...
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Line 3, column 571, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... which lays on between modern human life and history human life. Additionally, ...
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Message: This phrase is probably grammatically incorrect. Write 'those' instead.
Suggestion: those
... lived in earlier times. Especially for those ones who study history. I think it should be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, so, well, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1868.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 375.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98133333333 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65331859292 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541333333333 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.358323852 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.882352941 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317819842562 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104481932146 0.0831039109588 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155242160263 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223691993269 0.150359130593 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112663883492 0.0667264976115 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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