Mentian advertising executives.
The author of the article examines a study on the correlation between the amount of sleep needed by business executives and their companies' success. From the result of the study, the author concludes that business should only hire people who need less sleep in order to prosper. The author's argument relies on a number of unproven assumptions, including that the results of the study can be taken as a clear indicator of a positive correlation between amount of sleep needed and a business' success and that the executives being surveyed are in fact the impetus behind their firms' fast growth. These assumptions, if proven unwarranted, would significantly weaken the author's conclusion. The study mentioned by the author only involves subjects who are Mentian advertising executives, which represent only a small pool of executives in varied business sectors all over the world. Thus, the validity of the study is questionable when applied to any general business. For example, maybe Mentian advertising firms devote a significant amount of work time to designing and filming their advertisement, this requiring a lot more time spent in the film studio. If this is the case, then it may certainly be true that those executives who need less sleep will be more frequently present on the studio to oversee their ad production, and in turn leading to better advertisement. However, a trend that can only be seen in the Mentian advertising sector should not applied to all other business sectors, including technology, law, or financial. For example, an executive of a technology company may not need to spend a great deal of on site working time because they can write programs and deploy production changes through the internet using web services. This means that a tech firm can be just as successful if its executives spend more time at home and need more time sleeping. Thus, the author should not conclude that all businesses should hire people who need less sleep in order to prosper. The author also makes the unproven assumption in his article that the executives who sleep less are indeed the main driving force behind their firms' success. However, this may not be the general case. For instance, more experienced executives in bigger companies may sometimes require less sleep because they have more work to do in managing a much larger team. Then maybe the firms that had higher profit margins in the study are simply larger firms with a lot more employees for the executives to manage, hence forcing executives to become inured to a tight sleeping schedule. At the same time, the employees of the company may be requiring more sleep to actually put in productive work everyday. Thus, it would be wrong to generalize from the study to the contention that all employees, whether possessing an executive position or not, who need less hours of sleep are more productive. This is because the study mentioned in the article does not mention the sleeping requirement of other employees, only executives. Therefore, the author's conclusion that businesses should only hire employees who need less than 6 hours of sleep is flawed. In order to make a more cogent argument, the author of the article needs to analyze and support all the assumptions he has made with further statistics and evidence. It would also benefit his argument if he makes a less generalized conclusion and focuses more on the scope of the results of the study he mentions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 284, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...eed less sleep in order to prosper. The authors argument relies on a number of unproven...
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Line 1, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...rranted, would significantly weaken the authors conclusion. The study mentioned by the ...
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Line 1, column 744, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...ed by the author only involves subjects who are Mentian advertising executives, which r...
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Line 1, column 1454, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'apply'
Suggestion: apply
...e Mentian advertising sector should not applied to all other business sectors, includin...
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Line 1, column 2677, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...leep to actually put in productive work everyday. Thus, it would be wrong to generalize ...
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Line 1, column 2836, Rule ID: LESS_DOLLARSMINUTESHOURS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer hours'?
Suggestion: fewer hours
... an executive position or not, who need less hours of sleep are more productive. This is b...
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Line 1, column 2836, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun hours is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... an executive position or not, who need less hours of sleep are more productive. Thi...
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Line 1, column 3022, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...loyees, only executives. Therefore, the authors conclusion that businesses should only ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, however, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 25.0 12.4196629213 201% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2869.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 575.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98956521739 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71419373609 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433043478261 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 909.0 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2076470928 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.409090909 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1363636364 23.4991977007 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 4.97078651685 20% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0815200154186 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0296254480627 0.0831039109588 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684389238351 0.0758088955206 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815200154186 0.150359130593 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667264976115 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 100.480337079 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.