"Most cultures encourage individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personalities in order to be like other people. Thus, most people are afraid to think or behave differently because they do not want to be exclude.
Culture is the image of music, arts, traditions and rituals of a society. The author claims 2 points. First one is, most cultures influence individuals to sacrifice a large part of their own personality for being like other people. Second one is the most people are afraid to think out of the box because they don’t want to be ostracized. I agree with the later claim. But I take exception with the former one.
Every person is surrounded by the culture of the society he/she lives in. Every culture of a country/society introduces its people with the social behavior, customs, rituals, arts the country/society possesses. There might be a good chance of people being influenced by the culture of their society. But, in this 21st century’s democratic world, there number of fascist countries that influences individuals to sacrifice their own individuality is very limited. Every democratic country provides its citizen the liberty to share their thought and shape their personalities. Therefore, every individual has an independent choice to shape up his personality in a democratic country. Let’s shed more light to it by giving an example of a democratic country: Bangladesh. This country has a rich and diverse culture in music, art, rituals and customs. And according to the constitution of Bangladesh, every person is independent to make and shape up their choices.
By nature every human being prefer living within a society than being excluded. Therefore, in spite of holding individual liberty, most people actually stay constrained within the four walls of the culture they are surrounded by. Because, most people are afraid that they might get ostracized if they shape their individualities and opinions differently than the accepted standards.
But still, there are very few outliers who dare taking stand to shape up their own thinking and personality the way they want. But this number is very limited and exceptional. And “Exception can’t be an example”.
In summary, Culture doesn’t force to limit the perception of the idea, individuality a person holds. Individuals who are afraid to behave differently encourage themselves to do so at their own peril.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 35, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'limiting'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: limiting
...le”. In summary, Culture doesn’t force to limit the perception of the idea, individuali...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, if, second, so, still, therefore, in summary, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1841.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 350.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99249264743 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525714285714 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.4228783453 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.0434782609 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2173913043 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4347826087 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.448239699298 0.243740707755 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111991617463 0.0831039109588 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114121190941 0.0758088955206 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.251480607221 0.150359130593 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.090328727169 0.0667264976115 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.64 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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