A nation should require all of its student to study the same national curriculum until they enter the college.
In my response to the argument, I suggest same national curriculum will help in binding the whole nation's student thought process but I also think that each individual should have a profound learning of his state's history, culture and religion.
If we talk about the subjects like Maths, Chemistry, Biology, Physics etc. these all should have nationally similar curriculum.Why? Let me illustrate this by an example. Suppose if I live in rural area and my cousin live in fully developed metropolitan city of the same nation, he would be having better access to the resources of studies and he can aid me over the phone, as the our curriculum is ditto. I can straight forward ask the book 'XYZ', page '24', question number 11. He can directly response to me for that particular question as the everything is same for us in terms of curriculum. Here subjects like Math and Science can be easily discussed. So the same national curriculum can help keeping the students on the same page.
However, considering the subjects like History, Geography and Civics (there could be more), students should have a curriculum which focus more on the local histroy and geography of the area where the students are actually residing. It is because, the students, when get more familier with local monuments, weather, soil, plant and species they will feel more like a part of the place. Subjects like history which render students the history of local place, monumnets etc. make interesting the students to go to that place to understand and indulge more into the subject. Similarly, for the local culture that has been followed by the that local place should have been more eloborate. Similarly can be said for the Geography and Civic.
The final inference is when it comes to the subjects of technical knowledge and advancement, curriculum should be national but when it comes to subject related to culture, history, geography and religion curriculum should be tailor made for each individual city for the deeper understanding of the place where one is residing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, similarly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1708.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99415204678 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68166118793 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.2526041259 60.3974514979 138% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.75 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.9375 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246362411392 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085582109453 0.0831039109588 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0990156394288 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163516386082 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633091651679 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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