A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The given issue states quite a difficult problem of education. A nation should require all its students study the same nation curriculum until they enter colleges. At first sight, it might seem rather reasonable and even wise, however, it conceals a lot of potential problems. Hence, such education policy should not be implemented, because it seriously limits intellectual development and creative potential of students.
Studying the same national curriculum will create many troubles for students, because, a school years are the period when a young student should explore the world from different sides. The main problem of such fixed curriculum is a problem of strict limits of observation. For example, a student has a great predesposition towards arts, however, the same national curriculum does not include fine arts. In this regard, the young studend will not be able to develop his or her creative skills. And consequently, the world may lose a new Mozart, for example.
The second reason against the same curriculum is that all people are different from each other. So, they should have possibility to find out own place to develop. For example, if a study curriculum does not much a student's preferences, he or she should have possibility to choose a school or educational program that matches him/her the best. The school years are tough for every person, because a young person does not know who is he? What kind of activity he likes more? Hence, in this regard, educational system should offer diverse programs in order to make a student's becoming more easy and fast. Consequently, in this regard, the proposed issue is not advantageous at all.
Perhaps, the given statement makes sense in only one case, if a government wants to build a unioun nation that consist of ordinary people. Such a rigid educational system seriously resembles the educational system of Soviet Union, where the same curriculum was implemented. Probably, it was beneficial for one side, for example, the grammar rate raised quite fast, and almost all people were able to read and wright, especially, if to juxotpose with Imperical period of Russia, when 80 percents of nation were illiterate. Hence, the same national curriculum may be advantegeous, but on the limited area.
To sum up, the same national curriculum is not the best decision for a nation, because it limits intellectual and creative potential of a nation drastically. Students should have possibilty to find out themselves and the way how they want to develop, and a nation must provide such possibility.
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Essay evaluation report
a unioun nation that consist of ordinary people.
a unioun nation that consists of ordinary people.
Sentence: For example, a student has a great predesposition towards arts, however, the same national curriculum does not include fine arts.
Error: predesposition Suggestion: predisposition
Sentence: In this regard, the young studend will not be able to develop his or her creative skills.
Error: studend Suggestion: student
Sentence: Perhaps, the given statement makes sense in only one case, if a government wants to build a unioun nation that consist of ordinary people.
Error: unioun Suggestion: union
Sentence: Probably, it was beneficial for one side, for example, the grammar rate raised quite fast, and almost all people were able to read and wright, especially, if to juxotpose with Imperical period of Russia, when 80 percents of nation were illiterate.
Error: wright Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: juxotpose Suggestion: juxtapose
Sentence: Hence, the same national curriculum may be advantegeous, but on the limited area.
Error: advantegeous Suggestion: advantageous
Sentence: Students should have possibilty to find out themselves and the way how they want to develop, and a nation must provide such possibility.
Error: possibilty Suggestion: possibility
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arguments: OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 8 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 419 350
No. of Characters: 2082 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.524 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.045 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.642 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.296 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.495 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Thank you very much for the
Thank you very much for the evaluation.
Could you be so kind to inform me - do spelling errors considerably affect the score?
No, spelling errors may
No, spelling errors may affect on e-grader, not human graders. But if there are a lot of errors and even human graders can figure them out, then it may considerably affect the score.
ok, thank you. and one more
ok, thank you. and one more question - if to compare the ets actual writing section and your evaluation, how much your evaluation is precise? Is there any difference between your evaluation and ets evaluation? Thanks in advance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 92, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ne case, if a government wants to build a unioun nation that consist of ordinary ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'consequently', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'kind of', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.22268907563 0.240241500013 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.136554621849 0.157235817809 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.13025210084 0.0880659088768 148% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0504201680672 0.0497285424764 101% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0336134453782 0.0444667217837 76% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0882352941176 0.12292977631 72% => OK
Participles: 0.0189075630252 0.0406280797675 47% => Some participles wanted.
Conjunctions: 2.81709408664 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0231092436975 0.030933414821 75% => OK
Particles: 0.0063025210084 0.0016655270985 378% => OK
Determiners: 0.109243697479 0.0997080785238 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0273109243697 0.0249443105267 109% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0147058823529 0.0148568991511 99% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2576.0 2732.02544248 94% => OK
No of words: 418.0 452.878318584 92% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16267942584 6.0361032391 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.58838876751 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.394736842105 0.366273622748 108% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.284688995215 0.280924506359 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.205741626794 0.200843997647 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131578947368 0.132149295362 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81709408664 2.79330140395 101% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 219.290929204 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.519138755981 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 58.5301339093 55.4138127331 106% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6194690265 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.380412469 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7316231783 59.4972553346 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.090909091 141.124799967 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 23.380412469 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.674092028746 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.21349557522 19% => OK
Readability: 47.4688995215 51.4728631049 92% => OK
Elegance: 1.49523809524 1.64882698954 91% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467952389468 0.391690518653 119% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0783284248397 0.123202303941 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0660184411176 0.077325440228 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.46746012674 0.547984918172 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.131514400228 0.149214159877 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165744055624 0.161403998019 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087989632439 0.0892212321368 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.312208285503 0.385218514788 81% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0554930626348 0.0692045440612 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.312584715102 0.275328986314 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327481818659 0.0653680567796 50% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 9.0 7.22455752212 125% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 3.66592920354 191% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 13.5995575221 140% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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