A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college

George W. Bush's adminstration implemented the "No Child Left Behind Act" in the 2000s with the high goals of bringing a standardized quality education to all children in America. In a speech aired on television, he said that he would make sure that all schools nationwide would have set goals to achieve, and that standardized tests would measure the progress of each school. "How can we know how well a school is doing if we don't have a way of measuring it?" he asked reporters. The "No Child Left Behind Act" and many other attempts at a national standardized curriculum have the goals of bringin...

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Sentence: George W. Bush's adminstration implemented the 'No Child Left Behind Act' in the 2000s with the high goals of bringing a standardized quality education to all children in America.
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Sentence: However, though being able to quantatively measure a school's performance is important, imposing a national curriculum on all students is ultimately prone to a disharmonious education for the individual student.
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Sentence: Perhaps a certain class has trouble with adding, more so than other clases, and a teacher can see that this class will need an extra two weeks for the subject.
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paragraph 1: introduction -- explain in your own words about the issue and give a thesis statement at the end. Give a reasonable not a dogmatic statement.

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paragraph 3: reason 2 + why reason 2 + example + a small conclusion for this paragraph.

paragraph 4: qualification -- moderate your position. This may involve a sentence beginning with "but" or "however"...

paragraph 5: conclusion -- reinforce the thesis.
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