I partially agree with this statement. I believe cooperation and competition, both is necessary to prepare young people for leadership. Without competition there will be no eagerness to excell. Cooperation is also important because we can not run a government or industry alone, we need cooperation.
First, Competition is a vital element for success. For example, in a industry or corporation if there is no competition, then employee will not try to become best of their field. If they can not excel what they do then they can never be good leader. Again suppose in a school there is no grading system and student do not compete each other, then student will eventually lose interest and will not focus on their study. So competition is compusory for leadership and success.
Furthermore, if we want to build our nation, our industry or any other field we can not do it alone. collective effor is needed for success. For building leadership cooperation is also imortant. For example, in 1947 Mahatma Ghandi 's leadership brought India freedom. But he did not do it alone. Mass people of India's support and cooperation was behind this achievemnt. Again, in a government office if someone wants to pass a bill which will make improvement to our society, he or she can not do it alone. It has to be done collectively. So cooperation a basic requirement for growing leadership among young people.
On the other hand, some people argue that too much competition makes people frustrated and sometimes evil. But it totally depends on people's moral basic and mental condition. For example, when two big rival corporation compete each other to get bigger share of market, they might start corruption and do it in unethical way. But we have laws for that and and if we make them obey law then this kind of situation can be avoided. So competition does not make young people frustrated, it actually prepare them for leadership.
In conclusion, even though too much competition or cooperation might be a bad thing, but they are the two component for leadership and young people should be motivated to practice both.
- TOEFL integrated writing: Altruism. 3
- Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as 58
- TPO-1-integrated writing 3
- "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned wit 63
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 261, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Nonetheless,
...ne of these very important characters. Nonetheless it is important for leaders to have a s...
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Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...leaders to have a sense of competition, so as to prevent themselves from being complacen...
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Line 7, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'argues'.
Suggestion: argues
...o displays cooperativeness. Some may argue that competition is not needed. That t...
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Line 7, column 536, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to create Bing if there was no Google? Cooperation helped many leaders get wher...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nonetheless, so, still, well, while, as to, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92054794521 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91286609561 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 215.323595506 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509589041096 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 704.065955056 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6352207213 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.6363636364 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5909090909 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77272727273 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0252791277553 0.243740707755 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00806873303684 0.0831039109588 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0149773240938 0.0758088955206 20% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0177395715605 0.150359130593 12% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0192092781858 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 100.480337079 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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