In today’s societies, the statement that all the student in one nation must have an analogous curriculum until they enter college has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. Different people have various types of responses to this topic based on their social, cultural, and familial backgrounds. However, as far as I’m concerned, I believed that same program for all students in one nation is not a reasonable idea for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing comes to mind right off the bat is that all people in the nation don’t have the same interest and same capacity, so designing a similar studying plan for all of them doesn’t yield a good result for a young student. let me shed a light on my point. In fact, many student talents may be waste away because there isn’t any circumstance that helps them to thrive. In addition, the same national curriculum means to focus on specific or limited subjects, so some students that don’t have enough capacity to understand them will annoy and maybe quit the studying.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that curriculum before the university is an important factor that influences the student life after that. Let’s make a brief explanation about that. If all student has the same plan, there is a possibility that most of them select an analogous major for their university, so after their graduation, their country will encounter with an abundance of unemployed people that have the same skill. In this condition, providing a job for all of them is a really difficult challenge. Furthermore, the described country can only develop in some restricted courses, so will face a lot of problems to fulfill all of their requirements.
In conclusion, there are a plenty of reasons that show impose a similar studying program for all student before university is not a appropriate thinking. Not only make a lot of talent destroy or not flourish properly, But also providing numerous morass for Its country. Consequently, it is imperative that the government provide different curriculum for the young student and let them choose among them based on their abilities and interests.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...based on their abilities and interests.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1901.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 372.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11021505376 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86198682895 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534946236559 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.3127685911 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.733333333 118.986275619 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.21951772744 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271201197132 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833869191765 0.0831039109588 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0749693268491 0.0758088955206 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167290890369 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0559373778225 0.0667264976115 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.8971910112 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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