Education is one of the most important pillars of our society. It helps us in shaping our younger generation so that they are ready to face the challenges of life and helps in the development of our society. Educating youth is simply an investment which every government is making so that it can provide fruitful results in future. Further, an individual will be fully able to develop the potential and hidden talent and use it to live a better life and try to create a better society. For this, the first thing that an individual needs to do is find his/her passion, talent and interest. This scenario is not possible if every student goes through the same course until they reach college. Hence, I disagree with the recommendation that the same national curriculum should be there for every student until they reach college.
Each individual is unique with its own peculiar set of talents, abilities and interest. A subject which one person finds interesting may not be as fascinating for the other person. Every one of us has our own idiosyncratic tastes and disinterests. If each of us goes through the same courses, then a person would excel in some courses which he/she likes but in other they would probably not do so good. This, in turn, will lower down the confidence of the students and they will start doubting their abilities in those subjects also where they are performing good or which interests them. They may start questioning their future and will not step forward to take risks and bold steps. Hence, It is a risk to have the same courses until a student reaches the college. An example would be the famous cricketer Sachin Tendulkar. Had he been studying science till the end of school and would not have started his extra cricket coaching in school from 6th class then the world would not have found their "God of cricket".
A question that might arise then how can an individual know about his hidden talents or interests until they are exposed to various fields. Yes, this question has been there for a long time. For this, we can have a system, in which up to a certain class, students should have common courses. For eg - up to 8th standard which can have the same courses which include science, maths, commerce, arts subjects all in the same ratio. During this period of 10 years from kindergarten to 8th class, a student would have sufficient time to know what interests him/her. Therefore in 9th class, they should be given an option to choose the courses of their interests or which help them in developing their peculiar talents. Therefore, in future, they only follow career paths which actually interests them.
In the end, I would like to say that it is incorrect to have the same path until college for everyone as each one of us possesses different talents. We can try to implement a system mentioned above which will help every student to judge his/her abilities and will curb the present scenario where most of the individuals are not sure about their career paths.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ping their peculiar talents. Therefore, in future, they only follow career paths which ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, may, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.4196629213 193% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 33.0505617978 182% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2499.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 524.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76908396947 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49061731367 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477099236641 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7597941997 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.96 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.96 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196519840782 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601207943727 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0889902450307 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117793506441 0.150359130593 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477572699967 0.0667264976115 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.8420337079 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.1743820225 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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