No field of study can advance significantly unless outsiders bring their knowledge and experience to that field of study

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, if, so, for example, such as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 379.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.46437994723 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41224685777 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09171785698 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530343007916 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.8652929379 60.3974514979 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.928571429 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0714285714 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.26938585218 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836653790854 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101735162628 0.0758088955206 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184631628339 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964903293562 0.0667264976115 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.1392134831 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.