In today’s societies, the statement that as more as people rely on technology in program solving, their thinking’s abilities degrade significantly has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. Different people have various types of responses to this topic based on their cultural, social, or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I’m concerned, I believe that technologies help most of the people to ameliorate their abilities, especially thinking ones, for some reasons that I elaborate in the following paragraphs.
to begin with, the first thing comes to mind right off the bat is that by using technology people can save a lot of time and appropriate it to plenty of diverse things that engage people’s mind more. In fact, technology just facilitates the process of thing people have to spent plenty of time in them, so when someone wants to employ that technology, he needs to consider sufficiently about how to use it properly. Therefore, Technology both save more time for people and compel people to exploit their mind. Let’s make a brief explanation about that. For instance, before the advent of the Internet, most people have to spend months and years to find their favorable content in libraries throughout the countries. Now, people can find a lot of good articles and comments just by appropriate keywords on internet search engines, although to become proficient searcher they need to think about deeply about good keywords.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned that technology provides a new world for an abundance of people to excite their curiosities. Whenever people become interested in something, their minds work harder to analyze their aspect and find a way to achieve it. If people access to the proper device that assists them to think more systematically, the possibility of their success will increase remarkably, so they spent more time on it and think more and more .let me shed a light on my point. The use of Autocat, the application that uses for building design, allow engineers to depict their mind very easily and see the result of their work, so it makes possible for them to plot as many designs as they want and in each designing may rise a lot of new ideas that need more and more hours of thinking; Thus technology is very helpful thing to improve people mind.
In conclusion, there are a plenty of reasons to show that technology is helpful if people used it in a correct way. Technology not only grant a lot more time for people to think about more important and challenging subjects but also it provides a situation that makes them think more. Consequently, it is imperative that people deem technologies as means which cause thinking’s improvement rather than mind’s deterioration.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2359.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 463.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09503239741 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90231759463 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526997840173 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.9470291256 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.4375 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9375 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229637718469 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879851002879 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622197888119 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165675598577 0.150359130593 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387716713176 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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