In today's societies, the question of it is better that parents who don't have a lot of time for their children dedicate this little time whether to play games or sports with their children or to do something that related to children's homework has become a controversial issue among people in many circles and camps. Different people have various types of responses to this topic based on their social, cultural,or even familial backgrounds. However, as far as I'm concerned, I believe that this short time must be allocated to the funny things for some reasons that I elaborate them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the first thing immediately come to mind is that children really need to have a close relationship with these parents. funny things such as playing games and sport provide the best circumstance for children to feel that they are close to their parents. Accordingly, parents can partially compensate their absence and convey good feeling to their children. Let's make a brief explanation about that. Based on the last researches that were published in a well-known journal, Scientist determined that if a parent dedicate just an hour a day to play with their children, it will have more emotional influence on them in comparison to when they spend a whole day just to help them in doing their schoolwork.
Another noteworthy aspect that should be mentioned is that, having fun time last more in the memory of children. In fact, the children make a better image from their parents when their parents associate with them in terms of having funny time. Therefore, they do not feel some lack of passion in their feeling and step freely on the path of improvements. I remember that when I was 10 years old, my father and I went to the stadium to see the soccer game, it was a very interesting moment for me and I can remember every moment it. Hence, this funny time and a plenty of other pleasure time cause to cherish my parent in every second of my life.
In conclusion, there are numerous of reasons to show that having fun time is better than spending this time to help children in their assignment. Not only pleasure time can create a close relationship with child and his parents but also it is more lasting in the childern's mind. Consequently, it is important that parents who don't have much time to spent with their children dedicate their little time for amusements.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1988.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77884615385 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61835238858 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502403846154 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.2486059335 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.25 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.45110844103 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.441142399607 0.236089414692 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145670569634 0.076458572812 191% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857763925538 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286176533337 0.150856017488 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041166015148 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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