As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorte.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree of disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Today, we live in plenty electronic machine world. Technology is an important part of our lives and we still make the new things that make us to solve problems more efficiently. However, it doesn’t mean that people are extremely depends on modern technology as much as losing their thinking and consideration. Therefore, I disagree with that the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate because of the reliance on machines.
As everyone knows, some devices such as a calculator, navigator, and mobile phones make our daily lives more convenient. It is through navigator that we can get our destination with no problems even though it is far from city where we live in or first visiting unfamiliar place. Also, people actually do not calculate arithmetic matters by themselves, except for specific situation like their academic exam, they use calculators in their mobile phone. It is definitely true that people somewhat depend on technology for saving time, effort and energy and it means that people in modern technology life become more and more lazy. But I don’t think that this laziness is correlate to deterioration of our abstruse thinking and incapacity to solve problems.
With the laziness, we have developed our ability to consider problems and utilize technology. When you find some information that you need for school assignment or troubles, it doesn’t work that just put keyword of your topic and problems. You need to consider what’s purpose of searching, what type of information you need and the validity of the results to choose useful and valuable things from the sources which consist of massive information. In addition, people are not passive beings that only get helps from machines, humans the only one who invent, manipulate and use the technology. Some scientist use the newest technology to find novel phenomenon and solve problems in our society such as global warming, fatal contagious disease and some others make that new machine to contribute our society.
In this way, people have to think continuously for themselves without end. Also, I believed that the people’s dependency on daily life technology is actually essential to solve more enormous international problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'uses'.
Suggestion: uses
... and use the technology. Some scientist use the newest technology to find novel phe...
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Line 7, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e more enormous international problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, still, therefore, except for, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 33.0505617978 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30919220056 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88632887782 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548746518106 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3035441039 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.125 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.21951772744 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283885908768 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902202015397 0.0831039109588 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670072154542 0.0758088955206 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179732076914 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024637603874 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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